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Veronica Mars

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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to get it to GA status. All of article needs reviewing. Thanks.

Thanks, Corn.u.co.pia Discussion 01:49, 10 March 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: An interesting article about a show I never saw. Some suggestions to improve it:

• Per WP:LEAD the lead should summarize the whole article - this needs to be expanded. My rule of thumb is that if it is a section or subsection header, it should also be mentioned in the lead somehow.
• Organization is a bit odd - I would move the filming locations section before the fan reception - I would talk about the show and how it was made, then critical reception, then merchandise, then fans. Could the awards and top ten info be made into a "List of Veronic Mars honors and awards" and just summarized here?
• It is often helpful to find a GA or FA or two to use as a model article for improvement - perhaps Buffy the Vampire Slayer (TV series), which is a FA could be a model?
• Some sections seem too detailed - since there are already episode summary lists, I think much of the who is sleeping with whom details could be left there.
• Please read about "out of universe perspective" at WP:IN-U and rewrite the plot summary section. I have not seen the show and had real trouble following it.
• Watch out for needless repetition - for example, the whole third season was cut from 22 to 20 episodes is presented at least three times, and the details on the story arcs that season are given twice.
• References from the internet all need title, publisher, author (if known) and date accessed - see WP:CITE

Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 16:16, 18 March 2008 (UTC)

• • PS Sounds as if it was not as popular in its third season - some negative criticism from then (or any time - surely not everyone loved it always) would help avoid POV. Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 16:36, 19 March 2008 (UTC)