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We Belong Together[edit]

Are we there yet? :). After extensive work by myself and User:Extraordinary Machine, I think it's near featured status. Any thoughts? objections? Oran e (t) (c) (e) 01:02, 4 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

  • Music. I'm about to begin work on Look at Me! and a musically-related article is not complete without the actual musical style. Who were the instrumentalists who performed on the song, what key is each note in? Can Carey execute melismas in the song? What's the highest note? Is the piano portion of the song in the major key or the minor key? Although this information is not easily found on the internet, perhaps paperback or books could be of reference?
  • "We Belong Together" is a song co-written and co-produced by American pop/R&B singer Mariah Carey for her fourteenth album, The Emancipation of Mimi.
  • Indeed it is a song, but what kind of song? Pop? Country? Rock?
  • "Pop/R&B" should be written as "Pop and R&B".
  • "...Mariah Carey for her fourteenth album, The Emancipation of Mimi." Comma splice.
  • The "chart performance" section is cluttered with extra, unnecessary information.
  • "Many chart experts predicted that ["Shake It Off"] would replace "We Belong Together" at number one" — reference?
  • The "free downloads controversy" requires some more references as a portion of it seems misleading.
  • The article contradicts itself: did the song reach number one or number two in Canada?
  • Furthermore, the charts are confusing. I'll take the initiative to fix them.
  • Several of the wikilinks are redirects.
  • Copy-edit and correct some of the writing; overall, it is good but a bit weak in places.

It's a good article, but not quite there yet. A few corrections and extra references will do the job well and hopefully the article will reach featured status soon. Good work. —Eternal Equinox | talk 03:25, 4 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Some corrections I'd recommend:

  • "When "Shake It Off", the albums' third single, reached number two when "We Belong Together" was at number one, it marked the first time a female lead artist had occupied the top two positions on the Hot 100." Although I know what you're saying, the sentence as it reads isn't correct. For one example, on X-Mas '93, Carey's "Hero" and Janet Jackson's "Again" occupied the top two spots -- two different artists, yes, but technically another time that a female lead artist had occupied the top two positions. Perhaps you mean to say, "...Carey became the first female lead artist to occupy the top two positions of the Hot 100."
  • "Antonio "L.A." Reid, Chairman of Island Def Jam Music Group, felt that something was still missing..." I believe that whenever you reference someone's feelings, it should probably have a source. Otherwise, we're just guessing how he "felt".
  • "To date, the digital download of "We Belong Together" (counting sales of the original version and the remix) has sold over 698,000 copies. As the song has sold more than 600,000 downloads, it has been certified triple platinum by the RIAA." I think sales information should be referenced to prevent false changes from fans/distractors in the future. Also, to the best of my knowledge, a song has to apply to be certified by the RIAA. Just because it reaches a certain sales figure doesn't make it Platinum.
  • I also think there are some minor sentence structure here and there than can be shortened. An example, ""We Belong Together" proved to be a success..." could be "We Belong Together proved successful", and eliminating passive voice, "It has been nominated for four Grammy Awards" to "It received four Grammy nominations".
  • I hope that helps!--Ataricodfish 00:20, 7 February 2006 (UTC)[reply]
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