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William Borah[edit]

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I've listed this article for peer review because… I'd like feedback prior to FAC. William Borah was a significant figure for the third of a century that he was a senator.

Thanks, Wehwalt (talk) 22:00, 1 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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I'm having a hard time following the lead as written. What does it mean to "bolt the party"? What is meant by "common war aims"? What is "failed of ratification"?
Per the recent RFC, religion shouldn't be in the infobox unless particularly significant to the subject
I feel that sometimes the prose is tending away from encyclopedic phrasing - for example, " where law and order was more the exception than the rule". Nikkimaria (talk) 03:42, 31 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

OK, thanks, I will work on these.--Wehwalt (talk) 04:15, 31 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]