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York City F.C. records[edit]

I think this article will need to be improved if York City F.C. is to become a featured topic, so I've brought it to PR. Thanks, Mattythewhite (talk) 20:21, 11 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from PeeJay[edit]

I think the lead could be improved beyond a single sentence. Per WP:LEAD, "the lead should be capable of standing alone as a concise overview of the article, establishing context, summarizing the most important points, explaining why the subject is interesting or notable, and briefly describing its notable controversies, if there are any". I would also suggest including info on the date as of which the information is accurate.
I would suggest including the years that players played for YCFC in the appearances and goalscorers tables, and maybe include information on appearance and goalscoring records in individual competitions, if the information is available.
- Done Years added. Mattythewhite (talk) 15:20, 13 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
There are probably too many subsections in the club records section.
- Done Organised. Mattythewhite (talk) 14:35, 13 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
The references should be expanded to include details on the publisher.
- Done Publisher added. Mattythewhite (talk) 13:20, 13 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Hope that helps. – Pee Jay 14:02, 12 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)[edit]

Here we go...

Your two references to rivals.net are deadlinks.
- Done Restored using Wayback Machine's archives. Mattythewhite (talk) 13:18, 13 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
You could update the "Correct as of..." dates throughout.
- Done Updated. Mattythewhite (talk) 13:18, 13 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Any relevant free images you could add?
- Done Image of Norman Wilkinson added. Mattythewhite (talk) 13:18, 13 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
D3N is wikilinked on its second use - probably useful to fully expand it and wikilink it on the first use.
- Done Wikilinked and expanded to full division name. Mattythewhite (talk) 13:26, 13 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Headings probably go down too far - you've got a 1.1.1 and a 1.2.1. but no x.x.2 so there seems little point in these subsections.
- Done Organised. Mattythewhite (talk) 14:14, 13 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Use the en-dash to separate year ranges.
- Done Endash added. Mattythewhite (talk) 14:14, 13 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
For most goals in a season, state which division each record was achieved in.
- Done Division added. Mattythewhite (talk) 14:21, 13 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Use full date wikilinking in the Club records section.
- Done Added. Mattythewhite (talk) 14:21, 13 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

That's about it I reckon! The Rambling Man (talk) 16:45, 12 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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Comments from NapHit (talk · contribs)[edit]

Have a look at List of Liverpool F.C. statistics and records, I think there are quite a few things you could use from there to help improve your article, or would it be better being a list, but that's up to you to decide NapHit (talk) 19:22, 14 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Harkey Lodger (talk · contribs)[edit]

The lead section: There is confusion between the "club" and the "team". Also, both are singular so should be "it" rather than "they".--Harkey Lodger (talk) 10:33, 13 February 2008 (UTC)[reply]