Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Lily Parr

She's currently a Start and I'd like her to have something better... Fluffball70 19:17, 11 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Citations go after the pun mark; not before (per MoS).
You start with a phrase maybe not adequate for starting a biography: "Although she was sometimes referred to as being 6ft tall, she was actually 5ft 10in. Unlike women's teams today, Lily played". And I see this phrase in the opening of a section towards the end of the article: "Lily was born in in a rented house in Union St, Gerrards Bridge, which at the time was the most deprived and poverty striken part of St. Helens. She was the 4th child of 7 to George and Sarah(Sal) Parr." Most often "Early years" go before "Career". Maybe you should read carefully some FA biographies, and then reconsider your structure.
"Personal Life" is undercited.
Format properly your citations, making use of Template:cite web, Template:cite news, Template:cite journal and Template:cite book.--Yannismarou 20:46, 15 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]