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Gerakas[edit]

I complete Domirsitanos' request.--Yannismarou (talk) 18:30, 29 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Yannismarou[edit]

  • Lead toooooooooooo long. Please, read carefully WP:LEAD and the relevant instructions. You have to make the lead a comprehensive summary of the whole article. It is not right now! And not more than 3 paragraphs.
  • "The first permanent residents descent from Northern Greece as Makedones from Makedonia and Arvanites from Ipiros, and inhabit around the old Athens-Lavrio railway that passed through, working at agricultural works, as well as islanders from the Aegean Sea that work at the famous Pentelikon marble workshops at the northern fields." Bad English. Wrong tenses. I do not understand what you mean exactly. Ancient Makedones inhabit modern Gerakas?!
  • Do not wikilink dates or years or decades. Per WP:MoS.
  • Byzantine, Roman, Greek. Capitals needed! You need assistance in prose. Very poor.
  • Very few inline citations and all in the lead. Wrong! Cite properly the main text, and read carefully WP:CITE. When referencing, make also use of these templates: Template:cite web, Template:cite news, Template:cite book, Template:cite journal, and Template:cite encyclopedia.
  • "The male resident of Gerakas is called Gerakiotis and the female is called Gerakiotissa. In plural, they are called Gerakiotes and Gerakiotisses." I am not sure about the necessity of that.
  • "According to the great historian". Remove "great".
  • Why don't you ever use past tenses?!
  • "According to the Gargittius historian Epicurus". As far as I know, Epicurus was philosopher; not historian.
  • Picture galleries are not recommended. Incorporate in the article the pictures you want, and the rest of them save them in COMMONS so as not to lose them.
  • Proper order: First "See also", then "References", then "External links".
  • You should add more aspects, not only geography and history. Culture? Transports? Demographics (you have some info at the end of "history" but this should be a separate section)? Why don't you take as a model a FA about a city?
  • I think coordinated should be in the Geography section.
  • About how to write dates, numbers, units etc., you need to read Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates and numbers).

I could mention a lot of further problems, but this is not helpful right now. What the article first needs is good English, a proper structure, citing, and a careful watching of MoS. It is very positive that the article is informative, and its main editor looks eager to further improve it.--Yannismarou (talk) 13:28, 30 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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