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SS American (1900)[edit]

Promoted --Eurocopter (talk) 12:06, 1 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Nominator(s): Bellhalla (talk)
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This article is about another of the steamers of the American-Hawaiian Steamship Company. This one was credited with sinking a ship in U.S. Navy service during World War I; unfortunately for the Americans, it was another U.S. Navy ship. The article has passed a GA review and I believe that it fulfills the A-Class requirements. — Bellhalla (talk) 12:44, 18 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review. — Bellhalla (talk) 18:05, 26 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support
  • "American-Hawaiian signed contract with the Tehuantepec National Railway of Mexico," Do you mean a contract?
    • *Sigh*. It's when I make silly mistakes like that one that really irk me… Yes, a contract is what I meant, and have changed it. — Bellhalla (talk) 18:05, 26 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • "six men he had personally saved to a life raft" Perhaps escorted would be better than saved here?
    • I changed to escorted, but I wish the source were more clear: it almost read as if he had carried them, but, of course, it didn't explicitly state that. — Bellhalla (talk) 18:05, 26 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Again, minor issues. – Joe N 20:57, 23 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for another helpful review, Joe. — Bellhalla (talk) 18:05, 26 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comments - feel free to disregard if you feel that the suggested change would not help the article.
    • This may sound dumb, but the thought just occurred to me...should "propeller" be linked?
      • Do you mean it is linked and you think it shouldn't, or it needs to be and isn't currently? — Bellhalla (talk) 11:19, 1 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
    • Should a short description of what the Isthmus of Tehuantepec is be included in the lead? I don't want to have to click on the link becuase I have no idea what it is, but I'm kinda forced to. :)
    • "Taken up for wartime service after the United States entered World War I in April 1917, [...]" 'Taken up' seems awkward to me...
    • Should "round trip" be hyphenated?
      • In the one case where it was used adjectivally, yes. :) — Bellhalla (talk) 11:19, 1 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
    • "She was sold in 1926 and taken to Osaka where she was broken up sometime after her arrival there in November." - November 1926, 1927? What year?
    • "However, when the United States entered World War I in April 1917, the entire American-Hawaiian fleet, including American, was requisitioned by the United States Shipping Board (USSB), which then returned the ships for operation by American-Hawaiian." - 'requistioned' -> 'returned the ships'?
      • Basically, the USSB requisitioned all privately owned ships over a certain size, which included the American-Hawaiian fleet. The USSB wanted to control what got shipped where, etc., with war cargoes and materiel given priority, but did not want to dirty their hands in the day-to-day operations. So, in the case of American-Hawaiian at least, the USSB let A-H operate the ships, but when and where the USSB told them to. — Bellhalla (talk) 11:19, 1 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
    • "American, which was lightly damaged by the collision,[4] [...]" - would '...was not heavily damaged...' sound better? —Ed (Talk • Contribs) 03:25, 1 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
      • Sounds like "six of one...". I'd rather go with a positive than a negative where possible. — Bellhalla (talk) 11:19, 1 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Thanks for the comments, Ed. — Bellhalla (talk) 11:19, 1 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support A-class alright. Nothing to complain about in the article, and nothing registers as problematic on the tool check links. Well done. TomStar81 (Talk) 05:45, 1 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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