Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Andrew Cunningham, 1st Viscount Cunningham of Hyndhope
Andrew Cunningham, 1st Viscount Cunningham of Hyndhope[edit]
Hi, i have added quite a lot of information to the article and i have formatted it and now i am just asking whether it needs any more information or whether any of it is inaccurate in any way. What can be done to impove it? Thanks Woodym555 21:06, 9 June 2007 (UTC) updated Woodym555 21:09, 9 June 2007 (UTC)
Carom[edit]
A good start; here are a few things you should address:
- Very, very few citations or notes of any kind. You may find it instructive to read the relevant MILHIST guideline, found here. This may help you determine what should be cited.
- Some very, very short sections. I believe most of them can be expanded, but if they cannot, they could perhaps be folded in to other, larger sections.
- Very, very little information about the rest of his life, both pre- and post-RN. I imagine this information is available, and it should be added to the article.
- I would remove the "gallery" section and incorporate the images into the body of the article.
- There are a great number of redlinks in the middle part of the article. You may wish to search around to see if articles exist for these topics under a different name. If not, you are obviously not expected to create stubs for all of them.
Hopefully these comments help a little; let me know if I can expand them in any way or provide any other assistance. A nice start, though. Carom 21:17, 9 June 2007 (UTC)
- Hi, Carom, thanks for your advice. I have acted on all of them and am now wondering if it should be forwarded for A class review? Woodym555 10:44, 13 June 2007 (UTC)Updated Woodym555 17:53, 13 June 2007 (UTC)
- The only thing I would suggest doing before submitting it to A-Class review would be to expand the lead section. You may find it instructive to read this guideline to get an idea of how long this section should be and what it should contain. For example, for an article the length of this one, I would imagine a lead section of two to three paragraphs would be appropriate. Carom 22:43, 13 June 2007 (UTC)
- Hi, Carom, thanks again for your advice. I have now added a new lead section which i think adds enough detail and i will put it up for A-class review. Woodym555 16:51, 14 June 2007 (UTC)
- This article just passed A-Class Review, thanks for all your help, should this review be closed and archived now? Woodym555 19:58, 20 June 2007 (UTC)
- Hi, Carom, thanks again for your advice. I have now added a new lead section which i think adds enough detail and i will put it up for A-class review. Woodym555 16:51, 14 June 2007 (UTC)
- The only thing I would suggest doing before submitting it to A-Class review would be to expand the lead section. You may find it instructive to read this guideline to get an idea of how long this section should be and what it should contain. For example, for an article the length of this one, I would imagine a lead section of two to three paragraphs would be appropriate. Carom 22:43, 13 June 2007 (UTC)