Talk:Abby Hagyard

DesertAngel 05:57, 20 August 2007 (UTC)

Conflict of interest
has made a number of edits to the article, and has since posted on my talk page. If anyone is watching this page and wants to reply before I get round to it, please feel free. -- John of Reading (talk) 21:39, 28 April 2012 (UTC)

(More) OK, I'm more or less taking the article back to where it was before edited it. The five edits made since then are minor, technical fixes to the edits made by AbbyLynHagyard. Here is the combined effect of AbbyLynHagyard's edits. Working through:

Infobox

 * Birth place was removed. Reference "oc3" mentions this, so I'm restoring it.
 * Ethnicity was added as "Norwegian, British". Reference "oc3" says that Hagyard is a Norwegian name, but I don't think this is enough.
 * Alma mater was edited. Reference "oc3" mentions St Patrick's College. It is clear from context that this is the one in Ottawa.
 * Occupation was edited. No source was given for the new role as business consultant, so I'm restoring the old wording.
 * Home town was added. This seems obvious from all the rest of the article.
 * Web site was added. I've left this.

Lead

 * Was rewritten. I've restored the old wording, with citations to the relevant sources. No source was given for the new role as business consultant. The post on my talk page challenges the use of the word "comedienne" so I've added an inline cite for this.

Background

 * Was rewritten. I've restored the old wording, which closely followed the information in the cited sources. No source was given for the new details.

Career

 * "Syndicated in 53 countries worldwide" was added without a source. There is nothing to this effect in the You Can't Do That on Television.
 * The end date was changed from 1990 to 1991. No source was given for 1991, and the date 1990 agrees with You Can't Do That on Television and with IMDb.
 * The business consulting paragraph was rewritten. The previous version had no sourced either and was added in 2007 by an editor named . I've chopped it down to one sentence.
 * The web site was added. It is in the infobox and external links, so doesn't need mentioning here as well.

Awards
It is unfortunate that the "five ACTRA awards" statement is only mentioned in a newspaper article about a fraud case. As AbbyLynHagyard points out on my talk page, and as shown in the references to this version of the article, she later received a full pardon. Per WP:UNDUE, I think it is justifiable to drop this statement and its reference.

External links etc

 * A new website was added. I'm retaining it, fixing the formatting
 * The birth place was removed from the "persondata". I'm restoring to match the infobox
 * Category:Canadian business consultants was added. This is unsourced and is a red link.

I encourage other editors to find more sources and improve the article. Disclaimer: I mostly stick to fixing typos. -- John of Reading (talk) 10:11, 30 April 2012 (UTC)