Talk:Abraham S. Kay

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Your information is really solid and you were able to find a lot of it, which is great! One thing I noticed is that your sentences are a little long and seem to run on at times. I suggest that you consider breaking up these long sentences into smaller ones to make your article flow better. I also think that you could create more sections within your article and break up your main information into those headings. Alternatively, you could consider creating just one main section (maybe called "Background" instead of "Abraham S. Kay") and just splitting your information up into two paragraphs. Your "Organizations and Achievements" section looks good!Brookeharowitz (talk) 17:24, 13 October 2016 (UTC)

Hey Brooke, Thank you for the critique! I went back and shortened my sentences so they flow better and i changed "Abraham S. Kay" to "Background" and split the information into two parts. I didn't think there was enough information to add more sections so I like your alternative idea. Thanks again. Melissa5464a (talk) 03:12, 20 October 2016 (UTC)

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