Talk:Agnes Grey

DYK nom
I nominated the article for DYK on expansion, if anyone wants to an offer an alternate hook, please do so at Template_talk:Did_you_know,Sadads (talk) 05:18, 14 October 2010 (UTC)

Comments
Here are a few points I noticed:

Lead Style Genre - Autobiographical novel
 * Charlotte Bronte is linked twice in as many sentences.
 * Governess is capitalised once, but not any other times.
 * first sentence is completely unreferenced.
 * In the last sentence before the quote, it is ended with a comma but no quotations are used. Could a colon be used? (I'm not really an expert on punctuation, so I'm sort of asking about this one)
 * The first several sentences of the last paragraph (describing the similarity between the book and her life) are unreferenced.

Those are the only things I'm picking up with my quick read. I suggest a thorough copy-editing before nominating for GA, as I corrected several grammatical/punctuation problems. PrincessofLlyr royal court 16:00, 15 October 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks, Sadads (talk) 16:02, 15 October 2010 (UTC)


 * I picked up the two lead problems and corrected these with a few other tweaks. Some other things I noticed


 * In the references change titles to either sentence or camel case rather than all caps.
 * Be consistent with the name order in the Sources cited section.
 * Be consistent with British or American English spelling. I was expecting British for context of article.


 * Keith D (talk) 22:28, 15 October 2010 (UTC)


 * Keith D, sadads and I are both Americans. If you could convert to British spelling, it would be much appreciated.  Thanks.Henni2me (talk) 23:57, 20 October 2010 (UTC)
 * I have done a couple of spellings to British English. Unsure of the word fictious should this be fictitious? Keith D (talk) 00:24, 21 October 2010 (UTC)
 * That was a typo on my part, we looked it up. Sadads (talk) 00:27, 21 October 2010 (UTC)


 * Looking pretty good for a stab at GA now. Keith D (talk) 00:43, 21 October 2010 (UTC)

Passages in the Life of an Individual
Pinion is of the opinion that "Agnes Grey" "is almost certainly a fictionalized adaptation of Passages in the Life of an Individual" This referenced statement is odd. "Passages in the Life of an Individual" is an unknown work. As far as I know, no-one, including Pinion, can say for sure whether it was factual, biographical or fiction. The general concensus seems to be that it was working title for "Agnes Grey". If this is true, then Agnes Grey cannot be described as a "fictionalised adaptation". This needs looking into.

Amandajm (talk) 07:33, 24 October 2010 (UTC)

Some more comments
Amandajm! Fancy seeing you here. I have a few more minor comments - not really a review, since I added rather substantially to the article here, but I do hope they'll make the article better. This article is nicely written, but...
 * There are words such as doesn't and isn't in the article, such as ...but representing a character who in fact doesn't gain in virtue, which is usually discouraged. It should be does not. ✅
 * Agnes Grey has a very "perfect" and simple prose style which moves forward gently but does not produce a sense of monotony. "Perfect"? As it's a quote, I believe it needs a reference.
 * Critics such as George Moore, suggest that Agnes Grey represents a style that "had all the qualities of Jane Austen and other qualities". Same here.
 * Cates Baldridge describes Agnes Grey as a novel which "takes great pains to announce itself as a bildungsroman" but in fact never allows its character to grow up or transform for ideological reasons. Direct quote needs a direct reference, once more. I'm also not sure about the fact that Agnes Grey represents ...a character who in fact doesn't gain in virtue. Agnes does seem to have learned more at the end. Hmm...
 * ✅, I think. It was a little more radical position as far as I could tell, so I tried to make sure that the attribution was in the sentence and the ref at the end of the paragraph


 * However, Agnes stalls in her development because of the corrupted nature of the household in which she is employed and the ineffectiveness of the moral transformation, become a static member of the bourgeois, ambivalent to the Victorian value of moral transformation in virtue.[7] This sentence sounds slightly awkward. Is the moral transformation about her or about the people she is trying to help? And "becoming a static member..." might be better if the subject becoming a static member is Agnes.
 * The "Critical reception" section could be largely expanded, I think. If I can, I'll try to help. :)
 * There isn't a whole lot of surveys of the criticism, but I will certainly relook, make sure we are not missing anything. I didn't want to go off into the OR direction and the couple of works I read didn't give Agnes Grey an explicit verdict on Agnes Grey, instead they almost assumed it's relevance and then moved on to their point, commenting on the extreme position of Moore. Also, we didn't try ILLing anything, so if anyone has easy access to sources that would expand on what we already have, go ahead and give it a shotSadads (talk) 14:42, 24 October 2010 (UTC)

Great work, everyone, and I hope this helps. :) I look forward to what we can do on this article, which has a great deal of potential. Warmly, Clementina   talk  11:41, 24 October 2010 (UTC)
 * F.B. Pinion agreed to a large extent that Agnes Grey was quite a masterwork but that Moore's examination of the piece was a little extreme and his "preoccupation with style must have blinded him to the persistence of her moral purpose" in the book.[11] This sentence sounds a bit too fast - as if it's rushing rather breathlessly along. Perhaps a few commas could make it more relaxed.✅