Talk:Airbus A380/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: ---Dough4872 15:35, 8 November 2009 (UTC) Comments:
 * 1) Superjumbo links to a disambiguation page and is probably unnecessary to link.
 * 2) The lead of the article does not need to be cited unless that information is unique in the article. Also, the lead is supposed to be a summary of the information to be presented in the article.
 * Made several changes, only one reference remaining, advise if more changes are necessary.


 * 1) "The aircraft’s final configuration was frozen" sounds awkward.
 * Reworded

I am placing the article on hold. ---Dough4872 15:35, 8 November 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) "New wider roads, canal systems and barges were developed to deliver the A380 parts": add "and" in between "new" and "wider".
 * 2) Can you combine the standalone sentence at the end of the Production section with the prior paragraph?
 * 3) Citation needed for "The aircraft flew from Toulouse with 474 Airbus employees on board, in the first of a series of flights to test passenger facilities and comfort. In November 2006, a further series of route proving flights took place to demonstrate the aircraft's performance for 150 flight hours under typical airline operating conditions."
 * 4) In sentence "This caused overall configuration management problems, at least in part because wiring harnesses manufactured using aluminium rather than copper conductors necessitated special design rules including non-standard dimensions and bend radii: these were not easily transferred between versions of the software", change the colon to a semicolon.
 * 5) "delivery would slip by six months" sounds awkward, change to delivery would be delayed by six months".
 * 6) Debold terms in the Overview section.
 * 7) In sentence "This enables the widespread use of laser beam welding manufacturing techniques[107] — eliminating rows of rivets and resulting in a lighter, stronger structure.", citation should be moved to the end of sentence.
 * 8) In sentence "It eliminates the bulky manuals and charts traditionally carried by pilots, the NSS has enough inbuilt robustness to eliminate onboard backup paper documents.", change comma to semicolon.
 * 9) In sentence "Singapore Airlines offers twelve partly-enclosed first-class suites on its A380, each featuring one full and one secondary seat, a full-sized bed, desk, personal storage.", add "and" after last comma.
 * 10) "COO John Leahy", delink COO to not have two touching wikilinks.
 * 11) Is there a citation available for the Orders and deliveries by year table?
 * 12) Can you add a citation for the unsourced statement in the Operators table?
 * The article looks good now, so I will pass it. ---Dough4872 15:45, 9 November 2009 (UTC)