Talk:Ali-Qoli Khan Qajar

GOCE Edit Request
Hello! In response to a request from @, I've completed my first pass on this article. My first step was to edit heavily with regard to pronouns and their antecedents first (who is he? he did what now?) to sort out the narrative before further edits to tighten up the language. This text seemed to avoid the Oxford comma and was "lightly" British, so I went with that.

Some possibly appropriate next steps that I'm not qualified to evaluate:
 * Comparing the main body here with the history described in Agha Mohammad Khan Qajar? I cannot evaluate the facts/details presented there with what is presented here, esp. military campaigns and battles.
 * For instance, should we incorporate Lotf Ali Khan more directly in the story? Other details?
 * Should we incorporate the other brothers more? Both Hossein Qoli Khan Qajar and Morteza Qoli Khan Qajar have pages that could use attention. They don't seem particularly treacherous, though, based on the current info in their articles.
 * In was perhaps intended to gain authority over central Iran, does this mean Ali-Qoli Khan was engaged in a ruse (fooling the Zands to actually control central Iran for Agha, not for Ali-Q himself)?
 * Identifying some places in this story, such as:
 * In invite Ali-Qoli to the palace in Tehran, is this Golestan Palace? If so, would including this fact be relevant?
 * In Subsequently, Ali-Qoli would play a pivotal role in subduing Khvar..., can we identify this location as one of the places mentioned at Khwar?
 * Organizational and other:
 * Should we remove the heading "Biography" and push all its subheadings up 1 level?
 * Some more sources? I don't have access to the best sources in general, nor can I evaluate their reliability in this field.
 * Probably some other things? I'm not an expert in this field and not 100% sure what is required of GA.

Feedback is very much welcome. Thanks! — LumonRedacts 19:23, 13 September 2022 (UTC)