Talk:Ali A. Rizvi

Lede
Hi, User:Mramoeba. The lede is supposed to establish notability. That is, it should first tell us why the subject appears in this encyclopedia. After that we give background details about their work and life. At the moment, the first sentence has too many things and it is not clear for a reader who doesn't know Rizvi what he is famous for. For example, see the article Albert_Einstein. While he was a patent clerk, this is not mentioned until the second paragraph because he is not famous for that. Ashmoo (talk) 12:18, 7 August 2018 (UTC)
 * I've taken out some of the extraneous descriptors from the lede. It is also possible to remove the 'medical science communicator' as this is the job he is currently employed in, (aside from his secular activism), but I don't know if this is considered background as most people will know him for his journalism on the subject of being an ex-Muslim and his secular activism. Mramoeba (talk) 21:48, 7 August 2018 (UTC)