Talk:Animal model of schizophrenia

Comments

 * Schizophrenia is capitalized in the WP:LEAD unnecessarily
 * . Quasihuman (talk • contribs) 14:43, 18 December 2012 (UTC)
 * Can the lead, with a sentence or two maybe, describe which species are the best models when, or if there is a significant gap/unidentified need in a certain area? This is an ignorant comment, I assume this knowledge exists.
 * I think "models were the most widely used, these" should be "models, were the most widely used. These" in the lead
 * . Quasihuman (talk • contribs) 14:43, 18 December 2012 (UTC)
 * Should it be "Pharmacological models manipulate" if they are still used? All that is said in the lead is just that the historical models were the most widely used, they could logically still be a minority of research.
 * . Quasihuman (talk • contribs) 14:51, 18 December 2012 (UTC)
 * Maybe we can get a sentence or less of what a schizophrenia lesion is so there is an accessible definition in the beginning of the article
 * . Quasihuman (talk • contribs) 14:51, 18 December 2012 (UTC)
 * Maybe we could also get some clarification for readers on the difference between a positive and a negative symptom
 * I hope these are helpful so far. I limited my scrutiny to the lead, without looking at the body. Biosthmors (talk) 21:34, 23 November 2012 (UTC)


 * I think the phenotype section looks odd. Might it be better as WP:PROSE? Or prose and tables? Or prose and a list? It seems like it is too much of a prose list at this point. Biosthmors (talk) 17:07, 3 December 2012 (UTC)
 * I see where you're coming from there, but I'm not sure if I agree. If this was changed into full prose, it would likely make a a bad paragraph, or a few very short paragraphs. The list format itself is approved of in MOS:LIST, and I think it complies with WP:PROSE, because the list is essentially a glossary. Quasihuman (talk • contribs) 14:37, 18 December 2012 (UTC)
 * I notice there is a 2002 source that is cited a fair amount of times. Might we be able to replace it with more recent ones? Biosthmors (talk) 00:14, 4 December 2012 (UTC)