Talk:Argiope radon

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 15 September 2020 and 17 December 2020. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Wikispiders11.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 17:31, 17 January 2022 (UTC)

Behavioral Ecology Student Comments
I like how this article is really detailed and has a lot of different headings. I especially thought the web section was really thorough and really interesting to read. I edited the headings on this article to format them in the Wikipedia style and to create a Table of Contents. I also adjusted the spacing between sections to make it more uniform. Although I noticed you did already have some hyperlinks in the Lead section, I added more hyperlinks throughout the article on scientific terms. A suggestion that I would have is to make sure that everything in this article is fully cited. The main place where I noticed an uncited piece of information is on the last sentence of the "Decorations" subsection. Also, for Wikipedia articles, you don't need to mention that the findings were found "in a research experiment"; you can just state the findings themselves. RenaBio472 (talk) 21:14, 26 November 2020 (UTC)

Student Edit Suggestions
Overall I liked the article! Some of the sub-headings seemed short so I would recommend expanding on them or if the data is not available combining information into more broad sections. A bit of a nitpick but a specific suggestion I had was using basal metabolic rate rather than resting metabolic rate. I believe that RMR is usually used for mammals or vertebrates in general only. BMR should cover invertebrates as well. I would also recommend spreading the pictures throughout the article on the sides as it will be more visually appealing. If you have closeups of the web and spider itself that would be useful for the description section and webbing section. I made a few minor edits of changing repetitive language, adding some hyperlinks and, correcting some typos. Hope this helps! --Dgoldblum (talk) 03:36, 1 December 2020 (UTC)

Student Sugestions
Nicely done, I just have a couple of suggestions to keep in mind. Wikipedia guidelines prefer that you remove language pertaining to studies done/methods used (“According to current research…,” ”Labs have used the values…,” “Based on a compensation model…”); you're already citing the studies. Make sure that you use active voice and consistent tense when necessary. There are a couple of unclear areas that are worth taking another look at. Western Australia is not mentioned in the distribution section, but is mentioned in the lead section. Does “easily attracted to the decorations” refer to decorations of webs or spiders (I'm a bit confused on what web decoration looks like for this species)? Also, consider defining phrases like “high-performing webs,” "genital plugging," and "courtship shuttering." Finally, the description of "The webs’ ability to stop an intense amount of force for an organism is not impaired by temperature, but can be affected by extreme cases of humidity. Having a too low or too high of a temperature can potentially counter the effects of the webs in capturing prey" seems contradictory. I accidentally was not logged in when making edits, so my changes appear under an IP address. Sorry! Stomatz (talk) 01:29, 2 December 2020 (UTC)