Talk:Arizona Robbins/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: M.Mario (talk · contribs) 16:21, 5 July 2012 (UTC)

Disambigs, Refs & External Infobox
 * There are 2 Disambigs
 * Add Publishers for all References (2,3,4,5)
 * Add video to Reference 1. also does this reference work?
 * For reference 1 and 17, Capshaw isnt the author, she is the person being interviewed.
 * Fill out references.
 * That is vague, please elaborate.  TRLIJC19   (  talk  ) 19:05, 8 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Fill out references just mean adding authors, works, publishers, which you have already done! — M.Mario  (T/C) 19:09, 8 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Everything is fine.

Lead
 * "Arizona has a "quirky" personality, and a costume designed to appeal to her young patients, including roller shoes and a HollyHobbie pink scrub cap" -> Arizona has a "quirky" personality, and is well known for wearing roller skates and a Holly Hobbie pink hat, designed to appeal to her younger patients. Link Holly Hobbie.
 * Actor names in lead (brackets).
 * "citing the addition of Capshaw as Arizona as an element of the season of which she was most proud" -> citing the addition of Capshaw to the cast as an element of the season of which she was most proud of.
 * Im not sure if the mention of Erica is needed in the Lead.

Plot
 * In my previous GA Review of Callie, you stated that you refer to characters by their surnames, however you refer to Arizona Robbins as Arizona.
 * I did not develop this article the way I did with the other characters who have GAs from me. This article was almost ready from another user, but abandoned, so I just did some minor changes and nominated. I have changed all first names to surnames.  TRLIJC19   (  talk  ) 19:20, 8 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "two embark on a relationship, but when Callie's father (Héctor Elizondo)" -> Name of the father?
 * Link Seattle.
 * "Callie is dismayed to learn that Arizona doesn't want children. They come to the conclusion that they cannot continue their relationship, as they both want different things." -> Merge sentences.
 * "However after a shooter enters Seattle Grace with a vendetta for Derek Shepherd, Lexie Grey, and Richard Webber, they are in lockdown together, and the two reconcile" -> Actor Names needed, "vendetta", needs explaining.
 * I've added actors, but I am not elaborating on vendetta. Vendetta is defined as "A blood feud in which the family of a murdered person seeks vengeance on the murderer or the murderer's family." The reason why the patient was seeking vengeance is clear, and it need not be elaborated; it has no effect on her storyline. The point was just that they were in lockdown together.  TRLIJC19   (  talk  ) 19:20, 8 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "However, a fight at the airport results in Arizona leaving for Africa without Callie, ending their relationship." -> Change Africa to Malawi.
 * "Eventually, Callie reveals that she is pregnant with Mark Sloan (Eric Dane)'s baby" -> need to explain how and why.
 * If this was Torres' page, I would.  TRLIJC19   (  talk  ) 19:20, 8 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Carter Madison Grant - What?
 * "the two get in a car crash leaving Callie in critical condition" -> Odd turn of phrase.
 * I disagree. The car crash left her in critical condition. It's fine.  TRLIJC19   (  talk  ) 19:20, 8 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "As the fifth year residents are coming close to the end of their residency, Robbins urges Alex Karev to become a fellow of hers, and subsequently is involved in a plane crash, endangering her and her co-workers' lives" -> You need to go into more detail here, and explain what residency. fellow is. A lot of complicated vocab. How do they end up in a plane crash?
 * I've elaborated on Alex and Arizona, but what do you mean how did they get in a plane crash. The plane crashed—no further information was given.  TRLIJC19   (  talk  ) 19:20, 8 July 2012 (UTC)

Development
 * "Capshaw later extended her contract to appear in all of the season's remaining episodes" -> I dont think Capshaw extended her contract, most likely Rhimes did.
 * Italics for BuddyTV.
 * Shortly after her arrival in the show, Arizona became a love-interest for Callie Torres. Add surname of actress in brackets.
 * "What a Difference a Day Makes" sees them experience difficulties as a result of Callie's family rejecting" -> In the above, it just says her father.

Reception
 * Bailey -> Link/Actor Name.`

I'll get started on addressing the issues tomorrow. TRLIJC19  (  talk  ) 04:58, 8 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Everything listed is done.  TRLIJC19   (  talk  ) 19:33, 8 July 2012 (UTC)

Great work, I am gladfully listing this as a GA! — M.Mario  (T/C) 19:47, 8 July 2012 (UTC)