Talk:Association of Naval Services Officers

Trying to point out problems
I have been trying to point out some of the problems with this article's text, but its owners prefer to revert it. Since this is deletion material, the changes are not something worth fighting for. If anyone cares, this is the list of problems I've raised. Please, feel free to ignore the list.


 * "The (ANSO) is an organization dedicated to assist officer recruitment and retention efforts...''"
 * All sources actually say it works of recruitment and retention of officers. No need to whitewash this.
 * "ANSO has chapters in many states"
 * This is too vague. Let's just cite the specific states.
 * "ANSO (...) directly assists the US Navy's in (...) educational effort"
 * This is too vague. "educational effort" could be anything from alphabetization from Socialist Ideology propagation.
 * "ANSO events (...) attract high-level military leaders"
 * This is a non-neutral description of its events, its participants and their motivations.
 * "Current ANSO Board of Directors"
 * Per WP:DATED, we should not use "current"
 * "Current Board of Advisors"
 * Per WP:DATED, we should not use "current"

All of these problems where pointed out but reverted on this edit. I leave this information here for anyone that believes in salvaging this article from deletion. --Damiens .rf 21:13, 30 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Paraphrasing is not a "whitewash", so I will disregard your first point as uninformed. As far as I can tell from the sources, the content you dispute is accurate.  For example, the NNS (and other sources) say "The organization supports the sea service chiefs by assisting in Hispanic officer recruitment and retention"  There is no whitewash here, so perhaps you are using words you don't understand. Second, there is nothing wrong with saying ANSO has chapters in many states, nor does it require a maintenance tag.  I'm sure we could expand it with more information, and now that you've posted your concern, I would be happy to do just that.  Three, it is not vague to say ANSO assists the US Navy.  That is exactly what it does.  Four, the sources support the description of high-level military leaders attending the conferences, so your concerns are misplaced.  As for the use of the word "current" it could easily be removed and does not require a maintenance tag. Viriditas (talk) 01:12, 1 April 2011 (UTC)