Talk:Augustus E. Willson/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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I'll be reviewing this article to ensure it meets the good article criteria. Mm40 (talk) 14:02, 25 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Upon reading through the article, I have only a few prose issues. I must say, this is a wonderful article and one I thoroughly enjoyed reading.

"After graduation, secured a position..." missing a word after the comma.
In naming his mother, use Née to clarify what her maiden name was.
"...an orphan at the age of twelve." "the" and "of" seem redundant.
Clarify two things about the move to live with his brother: Did his sister (whose name might be useful) also come, and how old was Augustus at this point?
"His brother Forceythe became terminally ill..." You can take out "His brother".
For the second paragraph of "Early life", I would use Augustus in place of Willson because there are two Willsons being talked about. Additionally, in "...and he took a brief hiatus..." replace "he", because Forceythe is the subject of the sentence, so "he" can only be used referring to him.
"...when he applied for position..." missing an "a".
In the lead, the article says that Harlan's association deepened Willson's support for the Republican party, while in "Early life" it says "strengthened his ties". Clean this up.
What year was Harlan's appointment to the Supreme Court?

I've reviewed the entire article, but I'm going to stop posting now because I'm extremely tired. The rest of the review will come tomorrow (I'll notify you). Cheers! Mm40 (talk) 02:27, 26 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"Republicans also carried the mayoral races..." I think "carried" can be replaced with a more specific verb.
"...violating the state's constitution for calling out the militia..." I would change "for" to "by". Also, expansion could be done over what came of this accusation.
In the paragraph mentioning "...Governor William Goebel." mention the term of all former governors.

I have to go now, so, the rest will be up later. Mm40 (talk) 13:52, 26 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

And now the rest.

The phrase "...but turned state's evidence..." makes no sense to me.
Changing "...gave an easy victory to Democrat James B. McCreary." to "gave Democrat James B. McCreary an easy victory" removes a word.

I'm putting the review on hold for 7 days, the amount of time you have to resolve these issues. Mm40 (talk) 22:30, 26 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Passing the article; Congratulations. Mm40 (talk) 14:21, 27 August 2009 (UTC)[reply]