Talk:BTS/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ippantekina (talk · contribs) 13:21, 31 October 2021 (UTC)

Will review this article. Because of its length, please expect a quite prolonged review. Cheers, Ippantekina (talk) 13:21, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Nice of you to take on this review for this music article. Looking forward to your comments and edit discussion. ErnestKrause (talk) 15:48, 31 October 2021 (UTC)

First read
Prose is arguably the most important criterion.

Lead

 * "the fastest group" reads awkward
 * Comprehensive and easy to follow. The group is inarguably so huge nowadays!
 * changed to "BTS became the first group since the Beatles to earn four US number-one albums"
 * From this source that interpretation is incorrect. "The last group to generate four No. 1s faster than BTS was The Beatles, who took just one year and five months ... the last group to log its first four No. 1s faster than BTS was The Monkees, who took just one year and 21 days" Ippantekina (talk) 10:13, 2 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Updated to "One of the few groups since the Beatles with 4 Number one albums in less than 2 years." ErnestKrause (talk) 15:08, 2 November 2021 (UTC)

Name

 * "expression" is over-the-top
 * changed it to "phrase". Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 22:21, 3 November 2021 (UTC)

Career

 * I personally dislike level-4 subheadings. Can you trim it to level-3 subheadings? For example, instead of three level-4 sections under "2014–2017", why not three level-3 headings? (i.e. "2014–2015: First concert tour", "2015–2016: Breakthrough", "2016–2017: International expansion")
 * The Beatles FA is currently using this type of TOC-4 successfully. If you are suggesting shorter section titles then I will go through these one by one. ErnestKrause (talk) 15:13, 2 November 2021 (UTC)

— Ippantekina (talk) 02:48, 2 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Sections from 2018 onwards focus quite a lot on the albums' successes, which is hard to follow. I would advise trimming them down. We already have separate articles on albums, singles, and tours for those information. Try to select only important details, and make them 4-5 paragraphs per section maximum.


 * The sections might look better with re-blocked paragraphs. There was a recent down-sizing of these sections and it might look better with the paragraph formats enhanced. ErnestKrause (talk) 15:13, 2 November 2021 (UTC)

MOS concerns

 * Be careful with overlinks. You need this script to detect and remove such links.
 * I'm not sure that I am getting the same results in running the script as you are. For example, in the current "Butter" career section, the first instance of Butter is linked while the rest are not linked. Let me know if there are any duplicates coming up on your running of the script for the other sections. ErnestKrause (talk) 15:43, 2 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Have you installed the script? You can click on "Highlight duplicate links" on the left-hand Tools to see which links are overlinked. I am seeing quite a few. For example, in the "Mainstream breakthrough and commercial success" section: SBS MTV, YouTube, Oricon, Billboard, Melon Music Awards, Seoul, Gaon Album Chart. Ippantekina (talk) 01:29, 3 November 2021 (UTC)
 * I've removed them. Please take a look at it and let me know if anything more needs to be changed. Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 21:34, 3 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Replace spaced hyphens (-) with endash (–) where appropriate.
 * Currently, the lead section looks clean for hyphens-vs-endashes, as does the Awards section which uses endashes correctly. Let me know which other ones are a concern in your read-through. ErnestKrause (talk) 15:43, 2 November 2021 (UTC)
 * In the references as well (for example: references #21 and #40). Ippantekina (talk) 01:29, 3 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Nice catch on looking through the references. I'll try to get through all of them today. ErnestKrause (talk) 14:34, 3 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Be careful with using Forbes as a reliable source; see WP:RSP to see which sources to use and avoid. Ippantekina (talk) 10:13, 2 November 2021 (UTC)
 * The current version of reliable sources for Forbes is that the print version of the magazine is reliable, with use of the on-line version should be restricted to only staff writers and articles which have already appeared in the print version including non staff writers. If you need to question any specific cite from them, then I cn try to verify it for its reliability. Reliable sources only for Wikipedia. ErnestKrause (talk) 15:43, 2 November 2021 (UTC)
 * You can click on the Forbes links of this article and see for yourself. For example, reference #130 is written by a "Contributor", and thus it is not reliable. All Forbes sources used in this article are online, so I would advise going through all of them. Ippantekina (talk) 01:29, 3 November 2021 (UTC)
 * If there are any Forbes cites which look odd, then I will look through them whether by staff authors or contributors. The decision on reliable sources was made by Wikipedia to be active from the date it was listed as unreliable which means only the last year or so. My own experience has been to have other editors ask me to change sources which used Forbes on other articles this year, and I have done so, though the change-over was merely formal since the data in the Forbes article I used was fully reliable and I simply shifted to another website which quoted the exact same numbers. In your example for cite #130, I am finding it fully verified on Billboard and etonline that: "BTS Debut New Album 'Love Yourself: Tear' At No. 1". I could re-open the Forbes discussion on reliable sources to revisit this if you think its helpful. For now, the Forbes decision by Wikipedia was made for current publications made after the decision on reliable sources was made. Either way, if any of the citations from Forbes look odd to you, whether by staff or contributors, then let me know and I will check through them. ErnestKrause (talk) 14:26, 3 November 2021 (UTC)

It is not my task to go through every Forbes source; that is your responsibility, and I just mentioned to be extra careful with Forbes because it is not as reliable as you think. Ippantekina (talk) 02:02, 5 November 2021 (UTC)
 * if I may offer an additional comment, the Forbes pieces cited are ones written by known/reputable music writers/journalists who have also written for other music sources e.g Billboard. The consensus note on articles written by Forbes contributors states that they can be used if written by a subject expert which I believe those writers qualify as, hence the reason they were used in the first place. -- Carlobunnie (talk) 18:59, 8 November 2021 (UTC)
 * I understand. I advise to be extra careful, and if there are substitutes (which are plenty i.e. Billboard) then swapping them is better. Ippantekina (talk) 00:53, 10 November 2021 (UTC)

2010–2014

 * "A group who could make socially conscious music without the restrictions K-pop bands were known for, able to be sincere and genuine in a time where K-pop bands were highly regimented." grammar
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 03:24, 3 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "The group was meant to debut in 2011 and featured on several tracks by artists such as 2AM and Lee Seung-gi before their debut was postponed and the group was reorganized into a more traditional idol group." consider splitting this sentence
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 03:24, 3 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "While the album peaked at number five in South Korea it was not a major hit." POV (how can we know it was not a major hit? The reference is not supporting this) Ippantekina (talk) 01:48, 3 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Change wording to state that it reached the top 5 on the Gaon Music Chart. ErnestKrause (talk) 14:07, 3 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Duplicate links removed, endashes installed, and Forbes cites converted. Ready for next set of edits when available. ErnestKrause (talk) 14:56, 6 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Yes, my comments will follow shortly. Please bare with my busy schedule. Ippantekina (talk) 04:06, 7 November 2021 (UTC)

2014–2017

 * See WP:PRIMARY. Replace any of the following references: YouTube, Twitter, and any social media. I am seeing a YouTube reference for "Boy in Luv", and YouTube is an unreliable source in this case.
 * ✅ replaced/removed youtube links. Ukiss2ne14lyfe (talk) 22:33, 8 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Replace "Korea" with "South Korea" (everywhere).
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 06:11, 7 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Use appropriate language templates for foreign language titles. You can use either lang or lang-ko.
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 06:11, 7 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "the ups and downs of youth" or something similar, for wording consistency.
 * ✅ I put "highs and lows". Ukiss2ne14lyfe (talk) 15:17, 8 November 2021 (UTC)


 * grammar.
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 06:11, 7 November 2021 (UTC)


 * What is the "youth series"? I am not seeing an introduction anywhere.
 * ✅ I put "The album served as the introduction to their youth trilogy. A group of albums dedicated to the struggles of youth." w/cite near the introductory album. Ukiss2ne14lyfe (talk) 15:37, 8 November 2021 (UTC)
 * It remains unclear. Use "series" or "trilogy" throughout to avoid confusion. Ippantekina (talk) 01:06, 10 November 2021 (UTC)


 * at what position?
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 06:11, 7 November 2021 (UTC)


 * without a recorded number of audience this is redundant.
 * ✅ removed sold-out audiences Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 06:11, 7 November 2021 (UTC)


 * what is an "all-kill"?
 * ✅ linked Perfect All-Kill Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 06:11, 7 November 2021 (UTC)


 * italicise Billboard.
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 06:11, 7 November 2021 (UTC)


 * if this record was broken then it doesn't need to be mentioend.
 * ✅ someone removed it Ukiss2ne14lyfe (talk) 15:17, 8 November 2021 (UTC)


 * no need for quotation marks "million seller"
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 06:11, 7 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "attracted fans across generational boundaries" is POV. (You may want to read WP:FANCRUFT.)
 * ✅ changed to "attracted many fans" Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 06:11, 7 November 2021 (UTC)


 * I think Melon is a retailer site, and per WP:BADCHARTS we do not discuss retailer charts (i.e. iTunes, Amazon, Melon). Only discuss the Gaon Music Chart which is South Korea's official chart.
 * ✅ Ukiss2ne14lyfe (talk) 17:00, 7 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "with zero promotions" is redundant because BTS is a South Korean band, so it is understandable they don't promote in the U.S.
 * ✅ Ukiss2ne14lyfe (talk) 17:00, 7 November 2021 (UTC)


 * ditto with WP:BADCHARTS.
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 01:36, 8 November 2021 (UTC)


 * One does not commence "from... to". Change the verb.
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 01:36, 8 November 2021 (UTC)


 * One recurring issue I see is very POV wording: "aggressive", "success", etc. Try simply stating the facts.
 * ✅ Ukiss2ne14lyfe (talk) 15:57, 8 November 2021 (UTC)


 * How many dates were the 2017 Wings Tour in total? Readers would be better aided with specific numbers of dates, attendance and revenue rather than the current description.

Ippantekina (talk) 04:06, 7 November 2021 (UTC)


 * is this also the theme of "Come Back Home"?
 * "Maintaining its originally intensely dark feeling." ErnestKrause (talk) 15:21, 10 November 2021 (UTC)


 * is this notable? It disrupts the flow of the EP we are discussing.
 * Remove as off topic. ErnestKrause (talk) 15:21, 10 November 2021 (UTC)


 * who was the first?
 * Gangnam Style. ErnestKrause (talk) 15:21, 10 November 2021 (UTC)


 * I would change "Korean artist" to "South Korean artist" or "K-pop artist" to avoid confusion with North Korea
 * South Korea. ErnestKrause (talk) 15:21, 10 November 2021 (UTC)


 * superfluous
 * Remove redundancy. ErnestKrause (talk) 15:21, 10 November 2021 (UTC)


 * remove this, we all know the Dick Clark event is to celebrate New Year
 * Remove redundancy. ErnestKrause (talk) 15:21, 10 November 2021 (UTC)


 * What is "Big Three"? Ippantekina (talk) 01:06, 10 November 2021 (UTC)
 * The top 3 music agencies. ErnestKrause (talk) 15:21, 10 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Link them also (I am assuming they are SM Entertainment, YG Entertainment and JYP Entertainment?). Avoid jargon terms because non-K-pop readers may not understand what they are. Ippantekina (talk) 07:37, 13 November 2021 (UTC)
 * I've linked the pages. Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 09:51, 13 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Ready for next set of edits when available. ErnestKrause (talk) 15:21, 10 November 2021 (UTC)

2018–2020

 * I cannot find this in the Billboard ref.
 * Remove subordinate clause. ErnestKrause (talk) 16:30, 13 November 2021 (UTC)


 * does this mean they were the first performers, or that was their first performance at the awards?
 * changed to "BTS had their first performance" Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 09:14, 13 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Same issue I raised regarding POV wording and possibly undue weight.
 * Remove subordinate clause. ErnestKrause (talk) 16:30, 13 November 2021 (UTC)


 * comma after 200
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 09:14, 13 November 2021 (UTC)


 * I think BTS has achieved more than one number-one albums, so it is no longer their highest-charting.
 * removed "highest-charting"


 * Be consistent with "U.S." or "US" throughout the article (MOS:US). Revise the whole article if necessary.
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 09:14, 13 November 2021 (UTC) If you see anything wrong please let me know


 * Same problem with "U.K."/"UK"/"United Kingdom". Use one throughout.
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 09:14, 13 November 2021 (UTC)


 * MOS:NUM; either spell out or keep the number form for consistency.
 * Shorten text. ErnestKrause (talk) 16:39, 13 November 2021 (UTC)


 * same issue "Korean" vs "South Korean" again.
 * South Korean. ErnestKrause (talk) 16:39, 13 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Which one? If it is Love Yourself: Answer then stick them together for flow.Ippantekina (talk) 07:37, 13 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Specify "Answer". ErnestKrause (talk) 16:39, 13 November 2021 (UTC)

Ready for next set of edits when available. ErnestKrause (talk) 16:39, 13 November 2021 (UTC)


 * if this has been broken then it's not worth mentioning; "at that time" phrasings are best avoided.
 * removed Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 21:06, 15 November 2021 (UTC)


 * where is the ref?
 * Paragraph rewritten to keep USA results together, and Canada results together, and not mix them. Cites now support this for each country. ErnestKrause (talk) 00:16, 16 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Confusing; did they feature while they were on tour?
 * They were featured on the song. It was officially released while they were on tour. Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 06:38, 15 November 2021 (UTC)


 * this is unnecessary (as said previously), potentially OR or SYNTH or both.
 * removed Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 06:30, 15 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "a Korean act performed"
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 04:18, 15 November 2021 (UTC)


 * comma after StubHub
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 04:18, 15 November 2021 (UTC)


 * was the second best-selling concert act outside the US, behind Ed Sheeran
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 04:18, 15 November 2021 (UTC)


 * unnecessary because this is better included at the tour's page. We are not supposed to list every accolade here; plus Vivid Seats is of marginal importance.
 * removed Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 04:18, 15 November 2021 (UTC)


 * At the 20th Mnet Asian Music Awards, BTS won their third consecutive Artist of the Year
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 04:18, 15 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Redundant to mention Drake or Taylor Swift
 * removed Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 04:18, 15 November 2021 (UTC)


 * If this number has been updated (i.e. 2020 or 2021), remove this.
 * Remove this. ErnestKrause (talk) 00:16, 16 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Link Time 100
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 21:06, 15 November 2021 (UTC)


 * I believe they have consistently reached new heights. This is unnecessary to say.
 * removed Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 04:18, 15 November 2021 (UTC)


 * what does "the same" mean?
 * "the same feat" Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 04:18, 15 November 2021 (UTC)


 * ditto with "at the time". Remove all "at the time" phrasings throughout the article, if there are any.
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 21:06, 15 November 2021 (UTC)


 * unsupported by the BPI ref, which only mentions the certification.
 * Shorten sentence. Cover certification in sentence. Keep cite. ErnestKrause (talk) 00:16, 16 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Link Wembley Stadium
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 04:18, 15 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Due to high demand, BTS added more shows after tickets for the first dates sold out within two hours.
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 04:18, 15 November 2021 (UTC)


 * mobile game BTS World in June 2019
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 04:18, 15 November 2021 (UTC)


 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 04:18, 15 November 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 04:18, 15 November 2021 (UTC)


 * are there any better refs than the current Gaon refs (which seem like SYNTH)? Ippantekina (talk) 02:12, 15 November 2021 (UTC)
 * This is currently how the Wikipedia article for Love Yourself: Tear is set up with top sales being in Korea and as recorded by GAON for Korea. If you would like to see year by year results then that's possible, though GAON is the source for all of this unless you would like a different country covered (with lower sales numbers). ErnestKrause (talk) 00:16, 16 November 2021 (UTC)

Ready for next set of edits when available. ErnestKrause (talk) 00:16, 16 November 2021 (UTC)

2018: Section break

 * he group outgrossed legacy rock acts like the Rolling Stones, Metallica, and KISS, as well as fellow boy band the Backstreet Boys, Unnecessary. Mentioning BTS was the top touring group of the year is enough.
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 06:30, 17 November 2021 (UTC)


 * award show awards show
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 06:30, 17 November 2021 (UTC)


 * became the first artists in history should this be singular?


 * The "group" is singular, and the "members" are plural; the "artists" are the "members". ErnestKrause (talk) 16:41, 17 November 2021 (UTC)
 * No, use the singular form because "band" is a collective noun. Ippantekina (talk) 14:03, 18 November 2021 (UTC)


 * was named as the third best-selling album of 2019 by the International Federation of the Phonographic Industry was the third-best selling album of 2019 according to the International...; I recommend you avoid the passive voice whenever possible, and use the active voice instead.
 * Shorten sentence. Same citations. ErnestKrause (talk) 17:24, 17 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Attributing to the album's critical and commercial success worldwide the IFPI only recognises commercial sales; I also do not see the critical evaluation of BTS' albums anywhere thus far.
 * This article's citations to Rolling Stone and Billboard contain multiple comments on the critical evaluation of BTS released songs and albums. The current article is written to highlight the success of the group's releases based on success at the charts as supported by reliable sources. Adding the critical comments from Rolling Stone and Billboard already cited in this article would lengthen the presentation of the material if you would like it added at this time. ErnestKrause (talk) 17:38, 17 November 2021 (UTC)
 * This is SYNTH. The sentence reads as if the IFPI also honoured their critical achievements, which is not the case. Ippantekina (talk) 14:04, 18 November 2021 (UTC)
 * That sentence was re-done. There would be no synth now, only the stats. ErnestKrause (talk) 00:10, 19 November 2021 (UTC)


 * The album debuted at number one in the world's five largest music markets What markets are these? Plus Hugh McIntyre is a contributor and not an editor for Forbes, so remove it and replace with a reliable source.
 * There is a comment in the above section of this GAN from another editor that he is a reliable source. Nonetheless, his citation can be mechanically switched-out to another reliable source which contains the exact same information. Wikipedia policy at this time is that the print version of Forbes which used contributors may be used in Wikipedia as a reliable source. It is only contributors on the dot.com version of Forbes which are to be flagged. Nonetheless, his citation can be switched-out for another source which contains the exact same information. ErnestKrause (talk) 17:38, 17 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Forbes articles like the Hugh McIntyre ones are not print editions fyi. And yes, please replace them. Ippantekina (talk) 13:59, 18 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Replace them. ErnestKrause (talk) 00:10, 19 November 2021 (UTC)


 * It was the group's third top-ten and highest-charting single on the chart, giving them more top-ten entries than any other Korean act on the Hot 100 If I remember correctly BTS has got a number one song, so it is no longer their "highest-charting" single any more.
 * Changed to "It was the group's third top-ten single, giving them more top-ten entries of any Korean act on the Hot 100 chart." Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 06:30, 17 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Link Radio Songs (chart).
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 06:30, 17 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Link Mainstream Top 40.
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 06:30, 17 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Is the Canadian Top 40 chart the Canada CHR/Top 40? If not, remove it. If so, replace the Forbes sources because they are both by Hugh McIntyre, a contributor and not an editor.


 * Change out reference. The current Wikipedia policy for FORBES as a reliable source is stated by Wikipedia as: "Forbes and Forbes.com include articles written by their staff, which are written with editorial oversight, and are generally reliable. Forbes also publishes various "top" lists which can be referenced in articles. See also: Forbes.com contributors." If its in the FORBES print edition, by staff or contributors, then it can be used as a reliable source. ErnestKrause (talk) 17:45, 17 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Link Rap Albums (if the chart has not been linked previously).
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 06:30, 17 November 2021 (UTC)

Ippantekina (talk) 05:41, 17 November 2021 (UTC)

Ready for next set of edits when available. ErnestKrause (talk) 17:46, 17 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Let's clear one thing up: None of the Forbes sources I mentioned are reliable; they are not print editions (WP:FORBESCON). "Most content on Forbes.com is written by contributors with minimal editorial oversight, and is generally unreliable." Ippantekina (talk) 14:00, 18 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Taking out all McIntyres from Fortune tonight. If there are any remaining, ping me. ErnestKrause (talk) 00:09, 19 November 2021 (UTC)

2021

 * Refs 249, 250, 251 should not be bundled. Place them at the end of the sentence they are meant to prove.
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 20:00, 18 November 2021 (UTC)


 * making them the quickest act to reach four number ones since Justin Timberlake a decade-and-a-half ago a specific year is better.
 * It was 2006. ErnestKrause (talk) 00:07, 19 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Some Billboard citations (i.e. ref 255) are subscription-only. Mark them with appropriate tags using |access=subscription
 * That one and others now marked subscription. ErnestKrause (talk) 23:51, 18 November 2021 (UTC)


 * since Michael Jackson more than three decades ago ditto.
 * That sentence was pulled because it was a Forbes McIntyre cite. Replaced. ErnestKrause (talk) 00:07, 19 November 2021 (UTC)


 * On October 4, 2021, BTS' song with Coldplay reached number one on their songs chart marking both Coldplay and BTS’ first Number One on the chart. BTS made history as the first Korean act to top the RS 100." which chart? If it is the Rolling Stone Top 100, remove it because it is defunct.
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 20:00, 18 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Avoid one-sentence paragraphs.
 * Sentence merged. ErnestKrause (talk) 23:26, 18 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Inconsistency "Number One", "number one", "No. 1".
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 20:00, 18 November 2021 (UTC)

Artistry

 * Relink Hermann Hesse's. Ippantekina (talk) 14:15, 18 November 2021 (UTC)
 * His name is currently linked as Hermann Hesse with a double 's'. ErnestKrause (talk) 23:24, 18 November 2021 (UTC)
 * I mean the " 's" should be outside the wikilink. Fixed it myself. Ippantekina (talk) 03:29, 19 November 2021 (UTC)


 * All sections now have locks to Billboard subscription only, and the McIntyre (Forbes) citations have been changed out or removed. Ready for next set of edits when available. ErnestKrause (talk) 18:18, 20 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Some Billboard links are available for the public. Double-check which links require subscription and which ones don't. Ippantekina (talk) 14:19, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
 * On-line journals transitioning from free access to paid subscription is usually a work in progress and this may be a matter or days, weeks or months for Billboard to eventually shift to being all paid subscription access. I have switched back the Tamar citation to free access, though Billboard could change this again at any time. ErnestKrause (talk) 15:30, 21 November 2021 (UTC)

Continuing...


 * I am not seeing a reference.
 * Billboard reference added. ErnestKrause (talk) 15:30, 21 November 2021 (UTC)


 * According to a 2017 analysis by [...], BTS' albums contain recurring youth-related themes.
 * Enhancing of another previous editor to your version. ErnestKrause (talk) 15:30, 21 November 2021 (UTC)


 * See MOS:" for proper use of quotation marks.
 * Previous editor had unexpected use of quote marks which I have rewritten in parts of this section. Let me know if there is other non-MOS quoting which you spot anywhere in the article or this section. ErnestKrause (talk) 15:30, 21 November 2021 (UTC)


 * utilized a narrative form which narrative form?
 * The was incorrectly and ambiguously worded. Rewriting that sentence to a more conventional form. ErnestKrause (talk) 15:30, 21 November 2021 (UTC)


 * The section on the band's lyrics contain disparate information of disconnected songs. Try rewriting them so that they are cohesive and have a single theme.
 * Section break added for clarification between some of the separate songs covered in that paragraph. The original version was set up to cover a set of examples from different songs and different themes to show that BTS has separate social concerns among their separate songs. ErnestKrause (talk) 15:30, 21 November 2021 (UTC)


 * The third paragraph (about the members' songwriting) should be at the top of this section.
 * Third paragraph to top of section. ErnestKrause (talk) 15:30, 21 November 2021 (UTC)


 * The Commercial endorsements and Awards and achievements seem fine. I have one section left to check that is Cultural impact. Ippantekina (talk) 14:19, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Ready for next set of edits when available. ErnestKrause (talk) 15:30, 21 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Remove International Business Times per WP:RSP. Ippantekina (talk) 14:21, 22 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Replace with better citations. Modify wording to new citations. ErnestKrause (talk) 23:19, 22 November 2021 (UTC)

Legacy

 * grammar.
 * done Ukiss2ne14lyfe (talk) 18:31, 22 November 2021 (UTC)


 * remove their titles because they may be demoted/promoted in the future. Names are enough.
 * ✅ Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 18:43, 22 November 2021 (UTC)


 * confusing.
 * Replace with "of multiple media platforms...". ErnestKrause (talk) 23:19, 22 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Link the Seventy-third session of the United Nations General Assembly; ditto with the seventy-eighth.
 * Linked the 73rd and also the 76th one. But I do not see any mention of the 78th one. Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 18:54, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Sorry, my bad. Ippantekina (talk) 14:40, 25 November 2021 (UTC)


 * add an explanation of how many years have BTS been active up to that point. Ippantekina (talk) 14:30, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Added to the sentence before it. "That year, BTS, who was five years into their career, also became the youngest ever recipients of the Order of Cultural Merit." Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 19:21, 22 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Ready for next set of edits when available. ErnestKrause (talk) 23:19, 22 November 2021 (UTC)

Second read-through
Should I find no prose issue, I shall pass this GAN. Other than the prose, here are my comments on MOS: