Talk:Bombus dahlbomii

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Peer Review
Under Taxonomy and Phylogeny, you list the scientific classification in a single sentence. This made it a bit difficult to read, and I would consider breaking the sentence up. Under Distribution and Habitat, I added hyperlinks to other Wikipedia articles to help clarify your sentences (Patagonia, B. terrestris, B. ruderatus)

Under Queen behavior, I removed the parenthesis and incorporated it into the sentence itself. I made similar changes throughout the article, replacing parenthesis with commas when possible.

Under foraging, I expanded the genus name of the plant species and included hyperlinks to their respective pages. I also fixed a spelling error ( Crinodendron hookerianum from Crinodendron hookeranum).

Throughout the article, there were several instances where species names were not italicized. I'm guessing these glossed over when moving the article from a word document, so I made the changes accordingly.

Overall, the article is well written and I only had to make minor changes in regards to formatting. Care should be taken to ensure proper hyperlinking to other pages, as there seems to be repeated hyperlinks and missing hyperlinks. PhonoxClassic (talk) 02:17, 22 October 2015 (UTC)

Peer Review
I liked your description of the bee as “flying mice” and the information about its decline in populations in recent history. In terms of your Taxonomy and Phylogeny section, I changed “phylogenetics” to Phylogeny. I’m not sure if the first sentence listing all the taxonomy information that is already listed in the box with the picture of the bee needs to be repeated. Is there more information about bees they may be related to? I also italicized the genus in this section.

In the Distribution and Habitat section, there were two minor spelling mistakes that I corrected. In Colony Cycle, I italicized the genus name and removed some repeated words. I think you description of the production of the egg cell structure is good. In general how long does the subsocial phase last?

As an aside, in the color detection section – since the bees cannot see red, how can they recognize conspecifics and kin (they themselves are red orange)? What are considered as rapid foraging patterns in the foraging section?

In the Invasive Species section, I don’t know if you still want to mention that the B. dahlbomii is the only bumble bee species native to this region – I think you repeated this in other areas of the article as well. You talk about invasive species and their effect on the survival and propagation of B. dahlbomii. I also italicized some species name in the following section about population decline. The information about the pathogen incidence could be merged into one section with pathogen mechanism and effect. Overall there were very minor changes that I made that were not already made by other reviewers – I thought the information you had about its description and population was really interesting. (talk) 23:49, 21 October 2015 (CST)

Peer Review
This article is very well written. I corrected some grammatical mistakes as well as moved around some sentences to make some of the paragraphs flow better. I do think however that you repeat the fact about it being the only bee species endemic to South America a lot, and I don’t think it’s a necessary fact for every section. I also added a hyperlink to Batesian Mimicry, and I do think explaining what Batesian Mimicry is would be helpful to readers. Vsalazar258 (talk) 03:23, 23 October 2015 (UTC)