Talk:California Senate Bill 32

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Great Job!
Great work! Your article regarding the California Senate Bill 32 is very informative. The table in your timeline section is a very effective approach for displaying the progression of this bill. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Shelanzuhdi (talk • contribs) 21:57, 6 December 2016 (UTC)

Online Volunteer Review
Hi, Cduran21 and Danae ! I've read through your article. Some comments:


 * Avoid overlinking to articles, such as "Conference of Parties" or "UC Berkeley", that do not aid the reader's understanding significantly.
 * Generally, only link to an article once, usually the first time it is mentioned. You have Jerry Brown, Arnold, and greenhouse gases linked more than once.
 * The article switches back and forth between spelling out GHG and the acronym.
 * I think MMTCO2e should be formatted as MMtCO2-e. Use the Advanced editing button to format subscripts.

I made some punctuation edits to your article, that you can check in the "View History" tab.

Great work!

Comment added by Totranm (talk) —Preceding undated comment added 05:00, 9 December 2016 (UTC)

Feedback
This is very informative and helps clarify the difference between the former AB32. Thank you- great work! Bobbi13 (talk) 20:29, 9 December 2016 (UTC)Bobbi13 (Carolyn)

Comments from an uninvolved Wikipedian
Here are some suggestions to improve the article from an uninvolved Wikipedian:

The most important thing to keep in mind here is that the entirety of this law is as follows: "In adopting rules and regulations to achieve the maximum technologically feasible and cost-effective greenhouse gas emissions reductions authorized by this division, the state board shall ensure that statewide greenhouse gas emissions are reduced to at least 40 percent below the statewide greenhouse gas emissions limit no later than December 31, 2030. ... This act shall become operative only if Assembly Bill 197 of the 2015–16 Regular Session is enacted and becomes effective on or before January 1, 2017."

This article has some good content but often strays from the topic.
 * I moved the timeline section into the article Climate change in California.
 * I created a new article California Assembly Bill 197 with content from this article. The vast majority of the AB 197 content in this article should now be removed.
 * I'd recommend better clarifying what SB32 does and how it interacts with AB32 and AB197. SB32 has some precatory language (not sure if this is the right technical term but hopefully you get my gist) about environmental justice but SB32 itself has nothing to do with environmental justice.  It just sets a broad GG reduction goal.
 * I'd recommend reducing the background section to content immediately relevant to this article (e.g. remove content about 2 degree threshold and Paris accord... not really that relevant to SB32 specifically). Maybe just set up what the regulatory regime was like before in California and how this new limit changes it.
 * I'm very confused about how cap and trade relates to this law. Aren't they just independent things? We've always had cap and trade but now the cap will be lower?

Thanks, Calliopejen1 (talk) 21:49, 9 December 2016 (UTC)


 * Thanks Calliopeien1 for the feedback! We greatly appreciate it. The way I interpreted the language of the law it seemed like the authors wanted to emphasize environmental justice as a main focus in the path to reducing GHG emissions. We will be working on fixing up the article in the next couple of days. So once again, thank you for your feedback. Cduran21 (talk) 01:53, 14 December 2016 (UTC)