Talk:Carl A. Schenck/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Vortex3427 (talk · contribs) 10:05, 1 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Sans the short lead, the article appears to be in good shape, so most of this are minor nitpicks.
 * First round, going up to the Biltmore Forest School section. I'll do the rest of the article in another update and then do spotchecks in a third
 * The lead needs expansion to better summarize the article.
 * Exact dates (including day and month) for birth and death should be sourced in the body..
 * 17th-century shouldn't be hyphenated when it isn't being used as an adjective.
 * Would However, [his grandfather] be appropriate? I don't what the family was doing in the 1600s would really matter to what his grandfather did. Response That section was/is awkward. I reworded it; see if that makes more sense. Basically, his grandfather had a governmental position, which also appears to have been influential. I think it is important to mention that his family was prominent and wealthy. However, I can't combine that info the way I would like to because of original research restrictions.
 * By third formerly trained forester, do you mean "formally trained"?
 * Vanderbilt first hired Gifford Pinchot as the estate's forester. Response what is your suggestion for this?
 * Link virgin growth to Old-growth forest, and link sluice
 * Comma after not Schenck's
 * Link sylvicultural to sylviculture
 * did prove his worth to his employer This is pretty vague; how?
 * Change did borrow to borrowed
 * Schenck wrote Vanderbilt that things looked bad missed "to". "looked bad" is an informal phrase, maybe replace this to financial troubles
 * Schenck long term Schenck's long-term
 * link back pay Response There is not an article on back pay or back payment. Do you have another suggestion for a link?
 * — V ORTEX  3427 (Talk!) 02:15, 3 October 2023 (UTC)
 * In the infobox (botany name), C .A.Schenck has a misplaced space
 * Starting from Biltmore Forest School
 * provide provided
 * hands-on, practical Aren't these synonyms?
 * the Vanderbilt's lands Remove "the"
 * ideology evolved Is there any information on how it changed?
 * link longleaf pine
 * link redwood grove
 * By long leaf pin, did you mean longleaf pine?
 * comma after Biltmore Stick
 * written out is an expression, use a more precise phrase
 * As a modern historian notes, You already mentioned Hill earlier, maybe mention his name here?
 * However modern historians comma after "However"
 * Maybe "Personal life" should be moved before the "Honours" section? It makes sense chronologically
 * — V ORTEX  3427 (Talk!) 02:35, 3 October 2023 (UTC)
 * @Rublamb: You can ignore those, I guess they were typos
 * I've done a few spotchecks to verify. I also ran it through Earwig. It came up with over 80% identicality for the Duke University thesis, but that's only because of the quotes, so that seems fine. I think it's okay to pass this article now. — V ORTEX  3427 (Talk!) 21:41, 5 October 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks. I am still going to work on the remaining comments. Your thoughtful review was very helpful. Rublamb (talk) 21:43, 5 October 2023 (UTC)