Talk:Carrot and Stick/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:35, 28 April 2022 (UTC)

Comments That's it. It's a good piece of work. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 17:05, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Just noticed, you use "episode" four times in four sentences in the opening para, which is a bit jarring.
 * ✅ Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "outside of the " literally no need for "of".
 * ✅ though some Americans use it Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "1.16 million" non-breaking space here.
 * ✅ Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "by Chill Wills" citation?
 * That's sourced from the end credits so no citation needed. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Plot -> merge six short paras into three medium paras.
 * This necessary? Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:42, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "Canadian IDs" explain, were they passports, driving licenses, what?
 * Canadian identification cards. No specifics. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "on the Sandpiper case" meaningless to most readers.
 * ✅ Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "led by the Cousins arrives" unclear.
 * ✅ Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "the cold open and" what's that?
 * Cold open = scene before title sequence Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Link short film.
 * Isn't it self-explanatory? It would also make a sea of blue. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "the Kettlemans again." The" quotes are normally directly cited.
 * Not if the cite is at the end of the next sentence, IIRC. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "performed a majority" the majority?
 * ✅ Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
 * " double as" link?
 * ✅ Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Mando image is crushing the refs on my screen, perhaps add clear before the ref section?
 * ✅ Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
 * "little bit." Nonetheless" ditto on direct quotes/ref.
 * See above. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
 * Done. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)