Talk:Christmas/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 04:25, 23 November 2010 (UTC)

I will leave comments in a few days.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 04:25, 23 November 2010 (UTC)
 * LEAD
 * I am unsure why Christmastide is mentioned in the WP:LEAD and Advent is not. Advent also seems to be one that should be included in the see also section. Also, since Christmastide is more commonly known as Twelve Days of Christmas or the Yuletide, these terms would be welcome in the LEAD.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 04:52, 24 November 2010 (UTC)
 * Parallel structure is needed in this phrase: include gift-giving, music, an exchange of greeting cards, church celebrations, a special meal, and the display of various decorations
 * Try either "include gift-giving, music, greeting card exchanges, church celebrations, special meals, and decorative displays" "include gift-giving, music, greeting card exchange, church celebration, special meal, and decorative display" or "include giving of gifts, celebration of music, exchange of greeting cards, celebration of faith, consumption of special meals, and display of various decorations" or something else in parallel structure.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 04:52, 24 November 2010 (UTC)
 * Either each paragraph of the lead should be sourced with citations or all content in the lead should be uncited with references in the main body.


 * Etymology
 * This section is a bit short to stand on its own.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:45, 24 November 2010 (UTC)


 * Celebration
 * I am a bit surprised that Midnight Mass is not mentioned in this section, but see that it has no distinct article. Any thoughts?
 * I apologize, but I am now noticing extensive citation needed templates and numerous paragraphs that are devoid of citations. I am failing this article because it is in need of much further work in order to meet WP:WIAGA.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:45, 24 November 2010 (UTC)