Talk:Clara Thalmann/GA1

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Reviewer: The Blue Rider (talk · contribs) 11:42, 21 October 2023 (UTC)

Lead

 * Since Workers' Party of Marxist Unification isn't further referenced in the lead maybe remove the acronym. What do you think?
 * I'm sure it'd be fine to remove, but it's also listed as "POUM" in the infobox. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:26, 22 October 2023 (UTC)
 * Alright, no problem.  The Blue  Rider  Postal horn icon.svg 10:08, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Add wikilink to guesthouse.
 * Added. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:26, 22 October 2023 (UTC)

Biography

 * Is it know which exact age she joined the Communist Party of Switzerland?
 * Not sure exactly. She would have been sixteen or seventeen by the time she was involved in the Left Opposition, and had already been in the party before that. Source doesn't give exact dates on her joining. The German Wikipedia article, citing her autobiography, indicates that she was in the party since at least 1924 (when she would have been 15/16), and before that had been a member of the Young Socialists Switzerland. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:40, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Add a wikilink to party line.
 * Done. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:40, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Is there any proposal of the Spanish anarcho-syndicalism that Thalmann was specially fond?
 * Source doesn't go into further detail on that, sadly. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:40, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Even though it's later implied they are a couple, I think it should be made clear in the first mention of Paul Thalmann that he is Clara Thalmann's spouse: she met Paul Thalmann through → she met Paul Thalmann, her future husband, through
 * Done. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:40, 22 October 2023 (UTC)

Spanish Civil War

 * A little abruptly that we are introduced to this professional swimmer facet of Clara Thalmann. I suggest adding some sort of background information about her swimming career in the introductory prose at the above section.
 * Added a wee introduction to that. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:06, 22 October 2023 (UTC)
 * Much better now. Thanks.  The Blue  Rider  Postal horn icon.svg 10:07, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * How did she got involved in the Battle of Barcelona?
 * She was in Barcelona, the coup happened, she went to the barricades. It's really that simple. This same thing actually happened with a lot of the prospective Olympic athletes that were there. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:06, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Add wikilink to anti-fascist.
 * Done. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:06, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Since different sources are being used for each statement, it makes me think that the «although» in Altough, she was only... is WP:EDITORIAL. I don't have access to the sources so if this isn't the case do say so.
 * Removed "Although" and broke up the sentence. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:06, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Add a interwiki link to disillusioned
 * Done. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:06, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Is it specified why women had no place in a professional army or were purged from the ranks?
 * To be blunt, misogyny. Republican men generally thought that women should be working behind the lines, often in hospitals, rather than fighting on the front. Thalmann herself said as much: "The women who built barricades and dug trenches … were now sent to hospitals". --Grnrchst (talk) 09:06, 22 October 2023 (UTC)
 * If this is said by the sources this could be added to the article, purged...due to misogyny.  The Blue  Rider  Postal horn icon.svg 10:07, 22 October 2023 (UTC)
 * It's not mentioned explicitly in the sources, which is why I didn't write that. It's just the vibe I've gotten from years of researching this area of history. Even the most progressive of men didn't like it when women were empowered. --Grnrchst (talk) 10:43, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Per MOS:SEAOFBLUE, two wikilinks right after each other are generally avoided. With that in mind, maybe remove the wikilink from «Battallion» since it's a more well-known term or if you can find a sensical rephrase for that even better.
 * Removed. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:06, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Add a wikilink to Trotskyist.
 * Done. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:06, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * What makes Bolshevik–Leninists worth of a redlink? (optional for the review)
 * They were a small but notable Trotskyist group on the Republican side. I plan on making a wee article on them at some point, I'm just collecting sources. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:06, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * What's the relevance of the Friends of Durruti Group being under Hans Freund direction?
 * The Friends of Durruti were often accused of being Trotskyists, or under the control of Trotskyists. Thalmann's thoughts on this in her memoirs led weight to that, even if the allegations may or may not have been accurate. I can cut this if it's not relevant to her biography. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:06, 22 October 2023 (UTC)
 * Maybe it could be clarified that them being under a Trotskyist wasn't desirable, something like «believed» → «accused» and removing the German to give more emphasis that he was a Trotskyist, would make it more clear. What do you think? -  The Blue  Rider  Postal horn icon.svg 10:07, 22 October 2023 (UTC)
 * I'm just going to quote from the sources here, in order to better show what's being said on this issue:
 * Alba & Schwartz 1988, pp. 277-278: "Further, there are important elements of the Thalmanns’ narrative that, while absorbing and compelling, do not correspond with the accounts of others. Perhaps the most serious such instance involves the relationship between Moulin, the young member of the Trotskyist group around Munis, and the anarchist grouping of the Friends of Durruti. The Thalmanns’ highly colored account of the relations between Moulin and Jaume Balius, the main figure in the Friends of Durruti, would have the reader believe that the Friends were virtually under the guidance of Moulin; ironically, exactly the charge made by Stalinists. In this, the Thalmanns seem motivated by a “Trotskyist” disbelief in the ability of the anarchists to do anything “really revolutionary” or even commonsensical without the intervention of Marxists. Such considerations have led other commentators, including some eminent historians, to ascribe to Balius a clearly nonexistent former membership in the Workers and Peasants' Bloc (BOC)."
 * Bolloten 1991, p. 872n87: "For an account by the Trotskyists, Clara and Paul Thalmann, of the efforts by Moulin, one of the most active militants of the Bolshevik Leninists, to influence Jaime Balius, the vice-secretary of the Friends of Durruti, "in all-night discussions," to abandon his "innate Anarchist mistrust of the Marxists" and to collaborate with the Trotskyists, see Revolution fur die Freiheit, 189-90.
 * Alba & Schwartz's indictment on this leads me to think I should cut it, although maybe it's still worth mentioning with greater clarification. --Grnrchst (talk) 10:34, 22 October 2023 (UTC)
 * Perhaps you can add explanatory note stating that her claims are considered dubious by others, but this seems relevant enough to be mentioned with further clarification.  The Blue  Rider  Postal horn icon.svg 10:46, 22 October 2023 (UTC)
 * Ok, I've added a note. How does it look now? --Grnrchst (talk) 11:00, 22 October 2023 (UTC)
 * Looks great. Passing the article, though a pity that a lot of potentially interesting information wasn't yet studied by the sources.  The Blue  Rider  Postal horn icon.svg 11:28, 22 October 2023 (UTC)
 * @The Blue Rider: Thank you! And aye, hopefully her memoirs will receive a translation into English one day, which would be fertile ground for a more complete biography. --Grnrchst (talk) 11:31, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * She found herself in a rooftop and what happened next?
 * Mostly they sat there occasionally exchanging fire with the Civil Guards until the conflict was over. Orwell talks about this in Chapter Ten of Homage to Catalonia, although he doesn't mention Thalmann by name. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:06, 22 October 2023 (UTC)
 * If he doesn't mention her we can't add the information, too bad.  The Blue  Rider  Postal horn icon.svg 10:07, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Add a wikilink to Republican government's forces.
 * Done. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:06, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * By which grounds were they imprisoned?
 * That's the million peseta question that everybody was asking the government at the time. :P We could assume it's for armed resistance against the government, although in practice, Stalinists were actively repressing anyone associated with the Trotskyists at the time. For example, we still don't know the exact circumstances of POUM leader Andreu Nin's disappearance. Often there just aren't specific charges when authoritarian governments are cracking down on dissidents. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:06, 22 October 2023 (UTC)
 * Ahaha, yeah makes sense they didn't justify it.  The Blue  Rider  Postal horn icon.svg 10:07, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Not a super relevant wikilink but «Swiss folk songs» could use one to Music of Switzerland.
 * Added. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:06, 22 October 2023 (UTC)

World War II and after

 * With a wikilink in the above section being added to anti-fascism, this one becomes duplicated so it should be removed.
 * Done. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:11, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Was the attempt of creating a egalitarian community successful?
 * Source doesn't go into much further detail on it than saying: "[they] created their own perfect society in miniature, where the permanent social revolution they had fought for in Spain could finally be put into practice." Let me know if/how I can rewrite this better. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:11, 22 October 2023 (UTC)
 * Well, the source seems to imply they succeeded on it, so perhaps remove the «in an attempt to create».  The Blue  Rider  Postal horn icon.svg 10:07, 22 October 2023 (UTC)
 * Rewritten. --Grnrchst (talk) 10:24, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Working with the New Left's students on what?
 * Source doesn't go into any further detail. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:11, 22 October 2023 (UTC)

Later life

 * What is Paul Thalmann's cause of death?
 * No idea. He would have been 78 when he died, so it could just have been old age. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:20, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Add wikilink to Víctor Alba.
 * Done. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:20, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Do you think Stephen Schwartz should be red-linked?
 * Not sure really, this is the first work of his that I've come across, so I can't speak to his notability. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:20, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Add wikilink to Burnett Bolloten.
 * Done. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:20, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * Did she participate in the execution of said nuns? If so, this should be mentioned in the Biography section.
 * No, she just felt bad that it happened. Full quote: "Knowing what I know today I would not have agreed with … for example, nuns and suspicious persons being shot immediately. This happened in the heat of battle and was the result of an angry discharge of a generation’s suppressed feelings of impotence towards their exploiters and the fascists who plotted the coup. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:20, 22 October 2023 (UTC)


 * What's her cause of death?
 * No idea. Again, she would have been 78, so it's not inconceivable that it was just old age. German Wikipedia vaguely suggests she was ill, but I couldn't verify that in the source it cited. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:20, 22 October 2023 (UTC)

Selected works

 * Per WP:MOS-BIBLIO, if translations of the works exist it's recommended that they are also listed.
 * I don't think any English translations exist. None are listed on Worldcat. All my sources are either drawing from the German or French editions of her works. --Grnrchst (talk) 09:22, 22 October 2023 (UTC)

Stability

 * There were multiple edits today (21 Oct.), some of them very significant— 2,919 and 16,079 bytes. Is the nominator,, planning to further edit the article? Misread the day, the edits were made yesterday. The article is stable.

Copyvio

 * Earwig's Copyvio Detector points to 10,7% due to a «Further reading» entry (all sources are books not (fully) available online).

Image

 * The image is correctly tagged with a copyright status, is relevant to the topic and has a suitable caption.