Talk:Cookie stuffing/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Mokadoshi (talk · contribs) 01:11, 15 March 2024 (UTC)

Prose

 * I think Regular users do not tend to encounter cookie stuffing regularly in the wild needs to be reworded. Mokadoshi (talk) 23:45, 15 March 2024 (UTC)
 * The technology via which affiliate marketing websites... visits the URL. I think this sentence is too long and a bit hard to understand. The sentence immediately following this is much easier to understand by comparison. Can we split this up into shorter sentences? Mokadoshi (talk) 23:45, 15 March 2024 (UTC)
 * over 91% of websites would use redirects I think you mean "used" not "would use"? Mokadoshi (talk) 23:45, 15 March 2024 (UTC)


 * an account manager at one of the affiliate management networks CJ Affiliates I think an account manager at affiliate management network CJ Affiliates makes more sense. Mokadoshi (talk) 23:45, 15 March 2024 (UTC)


 * Optional: I think the "Mechanism" section would greatly be adding these details that I'm quoting here from the Edelman source: Under standard rules, an affiliate earns a commission only if 1) a user browses to an affiliate’s site, 2) the user clicks the affiliates specially-coded link to the merchant, and 3) the user makes a purchase from the merchant. Then you can say, in contrast to this, cookie stuffing is performed by ..... etc. Mokadoshi (talk) 00:41, 16 March 2024 (UTC)
 * This is the first part of the Mechanism section.
 * Take a look at my latest edit to get an idea of what I had meant. If you disagree, feel free to revert. Mokadoshi (talk) 04:16, 16 March 2024 (UTC)

Word choice

 * I think the "Background" section has a couple puffery words to watch that should be avoided, like substantial reduction of fraud, remarkably low. Mokadoshi (talk) 23:45, 15 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Removed

Lead

 * I think the lead is too long, MOS:LEADLENGTH suggests 1 or 2 paragraphs for an article this size. Mokadoshi (talk) 23:45, 15 March 2024 (UTC)
 * The lead is two paragraphs and two sentences, I think it obeys the guideline in spirit and not the exact letter. Shortening it down further will risk not explaining the core concepts of the article.
 * I won't push it too far, but take a look at User:Mokadoshi/sandbox as an example. I believe this still captures the core concepts of the article, while being 72 words (28%) shorter. Mokadoshi (talk) 03:50, 16 March 2024 (UTC)


 * It's definitely possible I missed something, but I didn't see any of the sources here call it cookie dropping. Maybe a citation in the lead would make sense here? Mokadoshi (talk) 23:45, 15 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Removed


 * I may also have suggestions on citations in the lead, but I'll wait for you to make these changes before reviewing that part. Mokadoshi (talk) 23:45, 15 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Generally citations are not used in the lede since it is supposed to summarize the rest of the article. If there is any new information in the lede, let me know, it might be useful to move it to the body

Layout

 * Optional, but I'm confused as to the difference between the "Mechanism" and "Techniques" sections. You can consider combining them. Mokadoshi (talk) 00:41, 16 March 2024 (UTC)
 * I think it is useful to introduce the basic mechanism of a attack/technique as a seperate section in CS articles. Combining both might be okay for you and me, but to a person who might learn about this for the first time, there is a chance they could get lost trying to grasp the basics of the attack.

Images
I was unable to find any images that could be added to this article, but I believe it may be possible for you to create a basic flowchart or diagram to illustrate how it may work. Take for example WebSocket. This is optional for the review but would greatly improve the article. Mokadoshi (talk) 23:45, 15 March 2024 (UTC)
 * I don't know if Cookie stuffing can be made as simplistic as Websockets, but I'll try and see what I can do.
 * Done (kinda)
 * @Mokadoshi I've left some comments under some of your comments and actioned some others, let me know if you have any further question, comments and we can discuss it further. Sohom (talk) 03:52, 16 March 2024 (UTC)
 * I think this is mostly done, just wanted to get your opinion on the discussion above re the lead. Let me know what you think, and either way, I'll approve the nomination. Good work! Mokadoshi (talk) 04:21, 16 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Looks good to me (though I would lose the citation in the lede) Thank you so much for taking the time to reword and fix issues that you saw :) Sohom (talk) 04:42, 16 March 2024 (UTC)
 * To be clear, I think the citation in my draft would be necessary according to WP:LEADCITE. It's true that you generally don't need to cite references in the lead because it summarizes the content below, but the exception is any content that is likely to be challenged. Generally the rule of thumb I see other editors use is anything that mentions a specific date, or number, or person's name. So, the bit about "$28 million" and "five months in federal prison" would need to be cited if it's in the lead. Mokadoshi (talk) 04:47, 16 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Fair point, I would have assumed that citing it in the body would have been sufficient. However, it makes sense to cite specifically since we do mention a living person's crimes. Sohom (talk) 04:52, 16 March 2024 (UTC)