Talk:Cormac McCarthy/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Urve (talk · contribs) 19:07, 19 February 2021 (UTC)

I will start reviewing this shortly. This is my first GA review, so if I make mistakes or am unclear, please let me know. Urve (talk) 19:07, 19 February 2021 (UTC)

I will work through the sections and then do the lead last. Urve (talk) 19:39, 19 February 2021 (UTC)

Early life

 * Period after "Rhode Island" is wrong
 * Source does not seem to support that his mother's maiden name is McGrail; I think it just suggests it's part of her last name now. (His parents, Charles Joseph and Gladys Christina McGrail McCarthy) Is there a better one for that claim, or am I overlooking something?
 * "Subdivision" sounds unnatural to me (neighborhood?) but that seems to be how it's described, so change not needed if accurate.
 * (this house burned down in 2009) may be better placed in an explanatory footnote or better integrated into the prose, like "which would later burn down in 2009".
 * Is there a better source for the claim that He also hosted a radio show? I am not too familiar with the guidelines on self-published info, so if not needed, disregard.
 * Yeah, it's a primary source. Removed. ~ HAL  333  23:48, 20 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Maybe nitpicky. But Some sources dispute this and say his family changed it does not seem supported by the source at the end of the paragraph.
 * May want to put the obit source after the quote so people know where it comes from.
 * It's okay to place a single reference for a larger block of text as long as all of the content comes from a single source. ~ HAL  333  23:53, 20 February 2021 (UTC)
 * Yes, that aligns with my understanding of BLP. But my comment was based on my (admittedly inexperienced) reading of WP:INTEXT, which seems to require for quotes "attribution inside a sentence of material to its source, in addition to an inline citation after the sentence". That second clause is my concern. But since the source in the next sentence, I think that can qualify as an appropriate exception to the guideline and change is probably not necessary. Urve (talk) 02:44, 21 February 2021 (UTC)

Early writing career (1965–1991)

 * Where is the quote it was the only publisher [he] had heard of from?
 * Removed tertiary source. ~ HAL  333  17:18, 21 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Is the comma in Also, in 1966 unnecessary? Don't know.
 * Maybe the "total poverty" quote should be clarified inline to say DeLisle said it; unclear where it's from right now.
 * based on actual events such as? Source says it's based on newspaper accounts of a real person, maybe good to clarify.
 * Clean up to the organization.. - second period wrong.

Success and acclaim (1992–2013)

 * I do not understand copyrights. But File:Graffiti in Shoreditch, London - Call It by Aske P.19 (11006858255).jpg has been nominated for deletion as a copyright violation as there is apparently "No freedom of panorama for 2D works in the UK." Remove?
 * From the look of the discussion, the consensus appears to be leaning keep. If they decide to delete it, I will remove it. ~ HAL  333


 * On second look, this is fine. But on first read it felt choppy. Make of that what you will. McCarthy's next book, No Country for Old Men (2005), was originally conceived as a screenplay before being turned into a novel.[37] Consequently, the novel has little description of the setting and is composed largely of dialogue.[2] The title originates from the 1926 poem "Sailing to Byzantium" by Irish poet W. B. Yeats.[38] It stayed with the Western setting and themes yet moved to a more contemporary period. The Coen brothers adapted it into a 2007 film of the same name, which won four Academy Awards and more than 75 film awards globally.[37]
 * Rewritten. ~ HAL  333  17:35, 21 February 2021 (UTC)


 * I think the ref for fires up on the hill and everything being laid to waste should be at the end of that sentence so it's clear where it came from.
 * Do we need to capitalize Father and Boy?
 * Rest looks good.

Santa Fe Institute (2014–present)

 * "trustee" for
 * I would rework He is unique, as nearly all other members of the SFI have a scientific background. Maybe something like, "While nearly all other members of the SFI have a scientific background, he uniquely does not."
 * What work did he do here? We say he has done "considerable work" and that as a result of his work "at the Santa Fe Institute, McCarthy published his first piece of nonfiction...", but it's not clear (to me) what he did.
 * I'm not quite sure either; the sources are scarce. I ended up removing that line. It was puffery anyway. ~ HAL  333  17:42, 21 February 2021 (UTC)


 * The novel was announced for 2016 by SFI but his agents declined to comment. Unsure if that's a meaningful distinction, so leaving it to you.
 * Otherwise rest looks good.

Have to go for a bit, will return with comments for later sections. Urve (talk) 19:39, 19 February 2021 (UTC)

Syntax

 * Wikilink polysyndetons in the prose? It is in the quote box but that feels unnatural to me; don't know.
 * Otherwise this is very good; I really like the quote box.

Themes

 * the seemingly inhuman foreign antagonist Anton Chigurh of No Country for Old Men is said to reflect the apprehension of the post-9/11 era - by whom?
 * I'm not sure if inserting "according to Jung-Suk Hwang" would do much for the reader. ~ HAL  333  14:40, 24 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Otherwise nice.

Spanish dialogue

 * I don't know if this section is particularly due. Unless there's scholarly discussion about the importance of Spanish, him being fluent and having Spanish-speaking characters is not all that important.
 * Removed. ~ HAL  333  14:41, 24 February 2021 (UTC)

There's a great deal of scholarship on this topic. I changed the subheading to "Bilingual narrative practice" and added references. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Triphibious (talk • contribs) 00:04, 8 March 2021 (UTC)

Work ethic and process

 * McCarthy has dedicated himself to writing full time, choosing not to work other jobs to support his career - but he is a trustee for the SFI? Unsure how to reconcile this with the source.
 * I think that all he does at the SFI is write. ~ HAL  333  14:42, 24 February 2021 (UTC)


 * The section is in good shape.

Personal life and views

 * Good.

Politics

 * Unsure how In the 1980s, McCarthy and Edward Abbey considered covertly releasing wolves into southern Arizona to restore its decimated population relates to politics. It should be in this section - just unsure if this is the appropriate placement.
 * Yeah, it doesn't fit perfectly, but it's somehwat political as it's an environmental issue with policy/legal regulations surrounding it. ~ HAL  333  14:43, 24 February 2021 (UTC)

Science and literature

 * Unclear what who do not rate with him means.
 * I don't have the full source, but should there be an apostrophe after Latin American writers? It looks possessive, but maybe that's not how TIME transcribed it. (In which case, maybe [sic]?)
 * I unfortunately couldn't access it either... ~ HAL  333  14:45, 24 February 2021 (UTC)

Legacy

 * Looks good to me.

List of works

 * Is it acceptable to have an empty section with just a main article link? Unfamiliar to me, and couldn't find something in the MOS either way.
 * It's technically okay, but it does look somewhat strange. I made it a "See also" link. ~ HAL  333  04:36, 20 February 2021 (UTC)

Lead

 * spanning the Southern Gothic, Western, and post-apocalyptic genres needs to be supported in the body of the article somewhere
 * As I couldn't find a source, I just removed the "Southern Gothic" bit. ~ HAL  333  14:50, 24 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Ditto for He is widely regarded as one of the greatest contemporary writers
 * It has a citation. ~ HAL  333  14:50, 24 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Suttree not being a commercial success seems unsupported in the body
 * I think the later As of 1991, none of McCarthy's novels had sold more than 5,000 hardcover copies can support it. ~ HAL  333  14:48, 24 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Is "The Kekulé Problem" a big enough part of his career to be given the mention in the lead?
 * As far as I know, it's pretty much the biggest/only thing he has published at the SFI or in recent years. ~ HAL  333  14:46, 24 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Rest looks good.

So I think if the above are addressed, this is very close to passing and becoming a GA. Urve (talk) 20:06, 19 February 2021 (UTC)
 * Pretty much ✅. I appreciate the review. ~ HAL  333  14:51, 24 February 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks, passing. Urve (talk) 18:54, 24 February 2021 (UTC)
 * Addendum: Earwig looks good. Highlights quotes and common constructions only, according to my look. There is what appears to be a mirror site of Wikipedia that is being caught, but that's ok. Urve (talk) 20:12, 19 February 2021 (UTC)