Talk:Cynthia Ahearn

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Barnardandy1. Peer reviewers: Lukeydukey24.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 19:44, 17 January 2022 (UTC)

Peer Reviewer for HSCI-3023
Hello,

Here are a few things that I would change to improve your article. First of all, it reads a bit more like a feature article in a newspaper than one that is appropriate for an encyclopedia. I would look at some of the leads in other Wiki articles and adjust your tone as would be appropriate. I think your outlining comments are incredibly appropriate and would do all of the things that you mentioned. It seems like you have really adequate sources with plenty of material to create some nice additions to her page so I think it's more of a matter of execution and creating content at this point.

Let me know if you have any questions. Lukeydukey24 (talk) 23:11, 20 November 2016 (UTC)