Talk:Deanne Foley

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This article is very well done, and I am not just saying that. It is very thoroughly researched, has a ton of information, and is quite interesting. You clearly put a lot of work into the details of each section, especially the 'Career' section. I only found a few minor formatting mistakes, but they are easily fixed (italics under film/TV titles). The biggest thing that may need a change is the headings. While everything you wrote may pertain to the career of Deanne, it could be broken up into different headings, just for organizational purposes. You could add an 'Early Career' section and include everything up until her first feature. For the rest of the information, perhaps a 'Feature Film' section, followed by a 'Television' section would work. If you wanted you could also just split both of her features into different sections and label them by the film's title. For the 'Awards and honours' section, making it into a bulleted list could make it seem more organized, but I will leave that up to you because I honestly think the way you have it formatted now is totally fine (it is just different compared to other article I have seen). Other than what I have already stated, I think your article is great. Good job on your research, you deserve an excellent mark! LoneUniStudent (talk) 23:55, 9 November 2016 (UTC)