Talk:Delina White

(Peer Review Feedback from Jamie Uy)

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I think the information presented so far is formatted well. Maybe separate early life and education sections instead of putting them together so that you can have more information to put down for each (higher word count lol). It also allows you to be more specific on each section while keeping things organized and not too convoluted. Make sure that the sources you are getting your information from are reliable and trustworthy. Maybe add a little more about what she is doing today/recent news and what she is involved in if she still happens to be quite active. Missing references (citations), artworks, exhibitions, collections, publications (if any), see also, and external links sections. Maybe for some pieces of information you present, add where you got the information from in the paragraph. Not the actual link but maybe the person/authority that presents this information. Maybe add more on early life, seems kind of short as it is a place where a lot of information can be mentioned and really give the reader more insight about the artist while adding pathos. Does not seem biased but make sure to avoid such a tone for the remainder of your Wikipedia page. Also avoid biased viewpoints from the sources you use. Everything presented seems relevant and nothing is distracting me from learning about the artist. Overall not bad.Nstrathman (talk) 18:39, 26 February 2020 (UTC)