Talk:Desert pupfish

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Major edits on 3 Oct 2013
Major edits were made to this organism page for a term assignment (see banner). In the first of at least two major overhauls, I added on large section title "Biology and ecology." This section incorporates the previous "Biology" section and expands upon it greatly.

Additions of note:
 * Motor patterns
 * Reproductive behavior
 * Feeding
 * 10 respectable sources

Additions/expansions needed:
 * Extreme conditions (working title)
 * needs much more information and a better title ("Survival in extreme conditions"?)

Also required:
 * Breeding
 * Aggression
 * Habitat
 * Description
 * Management factors
 * complete overhaul of previous sources
 * additional images
 * chart for mating behavior (need permission from Barlow)

Bakerb4379 (talk) 07:54, 3 October 2013 (UTC)

General Suggestions on Major Edits
The heading "Biology and ecology" could be changed to "Behavior and Ecology".

In the motor patterns section describing tilting and nipping, you might want to link or explain what you mean by substrate.

The information about sexual preferences, canabalism, and nest parasitism could be put under the reproduction heading. The "Reproduction" section could be renamed "Reproduction and Parenting Behavior". — Preceding unsigned comment added by Batoburen (talk • contribs) 22:12, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

Edit summary and comments on Major edits

 * I changed "somewhat" to "seemingly."
 * Motor Patterns section can be improved by changing the organization. While bullet points are effective for providing a list of elements, the list of motor patterns is not as informative as the context in which each motor pattern occurs. The information in the Motor Patterns section can better be explained in a paragraph that describe which behavior they are involved in or what the significance is. Grouping them into different behaviors they are related to, such as foraging and reproduction, would also help.
 * Motor patterns related to reproduction are repeated in the Reproduction section. Allasse0927 (talk) 22:01, 10 October 2013 (UTC)

Major edits on 24 Oct 2013
In an ongoing attempt to bring this article to GA status, I have added the following:
 * Taxonomy and phylogeny
 * Breeding
 * Extreme conditions
 * Various images
 * Sources

I have also rewritten/changed:
 * Description
 * Habitat and distribution
 * Management factors
 * Previous source.

I have relocated
 * Diet

Possible areas of further improvement:
 * Add more images, specifically of mating
 * Perhaps remove motor patterns and embed those definitions within the Mating section. If so, it would allow for the relocation of Breeding above Mating.
 * Make a distribution map. I am unsure if this is necessary, as I have added a distribution map form USGS, though it does not match the maps of other GA (I.e. one like this)
 * I have not evaluated the introductory summary at all.

Bakerb4379 (talk) 22:44, 24 October 2013 (UTC)

General:
VAleles (talk) 23:10, 31 October 2013 (UTC)
 * Add more links to other Wikipedia articles
 * No obvious grammatical errors. Well-written.

Edits/Comments
MLiu19 (talk) 23:44, 31 October 2013 (UTC)
 * This looks like a pretty nice article already!
 * Maybe the addition of a few links like to spawn (biology) would be helpful for users to branch out and learn more about a topic
 * Edited a tiny bit of grammar
 * Inclusion of the distribution map is pretty cool and helpful for researchers
 * Overall, this article is very well-written and nice, amazing job!

Edits
1) "Furthermore, though pupfish may engage in filial cannibalism, males have been observed to distinguish between eggs fertilized by themselves and by other males using olfactory cues. This behavior has been suggested as an analogue to the rejection of alien eggs by avian victims of nest parasitism." --> "Furthermore, though pupfish may engage in filial cannibalism, males have been observed using olfactory cues to distinguish between eggs fertilized by themselves and those fertilized by other males. This behavior has been suggested to be an analogue to the rejection of alien eggs by avian victims of nest parasitism."

2) "Sidling by the male causes the female to s-shape, which causes to male to s-shape and concurrently wrap his anal fin around the female’s vent." --> "Sidling by the male causes the female to form an S-shape, which causes the male to also form an S-shape and concurrently wrap his anal fin around the female’s vent.?

3) "Though the pair usually separates to leave one fertilized egg in the substrate, the female will very occasionally immediately s-shape and both fish will again perform the sequence through jerking." --> "Though the pair usually separates to leave one fertilized egg in the substrate, the female will very occasionally immediately form an S-shape and both fish will again perform the jerking sequence."

4) "Though they may breed during their first summer, most pupfish do not reproduce until their second summer." --> "Though they may start to breed during their first summer, most pupfish do not reproduce until their second."

5) "It has been noted that the desert pupfish are more abundant in environments with high vegetative cover, pH, and salinity, and low dissolved oxygen and sediment factors, suggesting that living in extreme conditions allows them to survive in environments that are hostile to invasive or nonnative fishes." ---> "The desert pupfish has been noted to be more abundant in environments with high vegetative cover, pH and salinity, and low dissolved oxygen and sediment factors, thus suggesting that living in extreme conditions allows them to survive in environments that are hostile to invasive or nonnative fish." — Preceding unsigned comment added by W.lin17 (talk • contribs) 04:43, 1 November 2013 (UTC)