Talk:Do-Over/GA1
GA Review[edit]
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Reviewer: Someoneanother 12:00, 12 June 2010 (UTC)
OK, all internal and external links manually checked, article stability is fine, image rationales are fine, no problems with neutrality or the like. Some minor tweaks and we're outta here.
Lead[edit]
- There's a citation in the lead, which is not necessary, please relocate it to an appropriate place within the plot section.
- "This episode takes place in the Fall of 2008, as TGS with Tracy Jordan, a fictitious sketch comedy series, is about to air its season premiere." - this isn't within the article itself, which is what the lead is supposed to be a distillation of, please either cover this within plot as well or move this over to plot.
- Pornography and video game are wikilinked separately, we do have a Adult video game article though, or had you discounted it in favour of two links?
Plot[edit]
- "has been very successfully released since it was developed in "Cooter".[3]" - could you clarify that Cooter is an episode?
Production[edit]
- Listing the episodes Tina Fey has a writing credit for doesn't add anything to the article, particularly when Don Scardino's director credits are not listed when he's brought up immediately afterwards.
- "Comedian actor Will Arnett reprised his role as Devon Banks" - IMHO '"comedian actor" seems wrong, would you consider replacing it with "Comedy actor" or "Comedian and actor"?
- "Jack tells her that you can do anything if you walk with confidence," - this would be better either as a quote - "Jack tells her "you can do anything (etc)" , ". or changed to something along the lines of "jack tells her that she can do anything if she walks with confidence. A direct and accurate quote would be preferable.
That's it, the article is on hold. Someoneanother 12:36, 12 June 2010 (UTC)
- All done. Staxringold talkcontribs 15:52, 12 June 2010 (UTC)