Talk:Dust II/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Slightlymad (talk · contribs) 12:02, 19 April 2018 (UTC)

Will be doing this.


 * Some inline citations need minor work; some have no credited authors, others have no work/publisher. Please fill in those missing fields inline. Finally, retitle instances of "reddit", "pcgamer", and Mail Online into Reddit, PC Gamer, and MailOnline, respectively; FN. 15 links to Kotaku, so that should be in the work param.
 * Done. Zoom  ( talk page ) 14:33, 19 April 2018 (UTC)
 * Would you mind terribly archiving all the sources? We can prevent linkrot for doing this.
 * Archived everything I could before your latest suggestions. Zoom  ( talk page ) 15:08, 19 April 2018 (UTC)
 * I spot a cite error at FN. 1, please fix. Plus, is there a reason why the other refs are unarchived? Patience,  Slightly mad  15:36, 19 April 2018 (UTC)
 * Fixed and because of robots.txt. Fixed the non-archived links now. Zoom  ( talk page ) 16:07, 19 April 2018 (UTC)
 * Period isn't needed in that image caption in Impact and legacy section, as it's an incomplete sentence. Shouldn't Far Cry 5 be italicized?
 * Done! Zoom  ( talk page ) 13:04, 19 April 2018 (UTC)

I haven't got to the prose and verifiability yet, so I'll get back to you on those. Patience,  Slightly mad  12:02, 19 April 2018 (UTC)

Not sure if the following claims are sourced in the article, but for the sake of maintaining text-source integrity please support them each with citations:


 * All of the positions are cited at the end of the paragraph. Wouldn't work if I put in the same citation for every single area, since the two citations at the end cover everything. If I need to change this, let me know. Zoom  ( talk page ) 15:21, 19 April 2018 (UTC)
 * See last claim. Zoom  ( talk page ) 15:21, 19 April 2018 (UTC)
 * Rephrased. Zoom  ( talk page ) 15:21, 19 April 2018 (UTC)
 * Done. Zoom  ( talk page ) 15:21, 19 April 2018 (UTC)
 * Rephrased. Zoom  ( talk page ) 15:21, 19 April 2018 (UTC)
 * Done. Zoom  ( talk page ) 15:21, 19 April 2018 (UTC)
 * Done. Zoom  ( talk page ) 15:21, 19 April 2018 (UTC)
 * Done. Zoom  ( talk page ) 15:21, 19 April 2018 (UTC)

Patience,  Slightly mad  15:06, 19 April 2018 (UTC)


 * I think the Design section could be expanded, as it lacks a summary of the creator's design process. You should summarize Johnston's design process documented in his blog (at Fn. 5) in a new paragraph, and maybe signpost it with a topic statement using your own paraphrased version of this text by Johnston, "
 * Done, let me know if there's anything I should change! Zoom  ( talk page ) 14:56, 20 April 2018 (UTC)
 * This paragraph is half-baked, and I'm seeing a couple of issues with it (see below). Please take time to review the source properly so that this paragraph will yield better results.
 * → Looks close paraphrased to me; it's almost the same wording from the source.
 * → This is confusing.
 * → Huh?
 * Per MOS:N'T, use of contractions should be avoided in encylopedic writing.
 * I fixed what I could of the issue, let me know if anything else comes up. Zoom  ( talk page ) 15:30, 20 April 2018 (UTC)
 * Probably best if we just quote this text directly instead,
 * Done. Zoom  ( talk page ) 12:27, 20 April 2018 (UTC)
 * Zzzoom, whenever you're quoting texts directly from the source, don't forget to enclose them in quotes, because otherwise it may constitute copyright violation. See WP:QUOTE for more on this. Patience,  Slightly mad  13:02, 20 April 2018 (UTC)
 * Thanks, I accidentally got rid of them while pasting the quote in. Zoom  ( talk page ) 13:06, 20 April 2018 (UTC)
 * Another inline citation issue: many sources are missing publication dates, please add. Patience,  Slightly mad  04:32, 20 April 2018 (UTC)
 * Working on it. Done. Zoom  ( talk page ) 12:27, 20 April 2018 (UTC)

Alright, I have no more issues with the article. I did a little copyediting of the prose which should be clean by now, and a spot-check of the cited sources, all of which are reliable and reflect the content accurately. Well done, Pass