Talk:Edward D. "Ted" Jones

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Edit Request – Addressing “Additional Citations” Template / Other Minor Edits
NOTE: I’m proposing the following edits for FleishmanHillard on behalf of Edward Jones Investments. I’m a paid editor and aware of the COI guidelines. This edit request addresses the “additional citations” template at the top of the page as well as a couple of proposed sentence revisions and removals. Thanks for your time and consideration.

Biography


 * Citation to add to first sentence: Jones was born in St. Louis, Missouri and studied agriculture at the University of Missouri.


 * Citation to add to second sentence: After serving with the Merchant Marines in World War II he returned to the University of Missouri and in 1947 worked as a page on the floor of the New York Stock Exchange.


 * Proposed removal: Third sentence (He worked for a year at Josephthal & Co.) as we are unable to find anything that validates the claim.
 * Citation to add to fourth sentence: He returned to St. Louis in 1948 to work for his father Edward D. Jones.


 * Citation to add to sixth sentence: He was managing partner of the firm from 1968 to 1980 during which the firm expanded to 300 branch offices.
 * Citation to add to seventh sentence: In the last 10 years of his life, he donated $2.2 million for Missouri to acquire property along 200 miles of abandoned Missouri–Kansas–Texas Railroad rail tracks to form a bicycle path for the Katy Trail State Park.

From: The planned eastern terminus of the park is the confluence of the Missouri River and Mississippi River.
 * Proposed revision to eighth sentence + citation addition:

To: The eastern terminus of the park is the confluence of the Missouri River and Mississippi River.

Rationale: The park has been open for quite some time now, so “planned” is no longer necessary.

From: In 2004 the park at the confluence was named Edward "Ted" and Pat Jones-Confluence Point State Park in honor of his wife and him.
 * Proposed revision to ninth sentence + citation addition:

To: In 2004, the park at the confluence was named Edward "Ted" and Pat Jones-Confluence Point State Park in honor of Jones and his wife.

Rationale: Inserting missing comma and correcting grammatical error.


 * Proposed removal: Tenth sentence (Differentiating himself from other corporate CEOs, Ted Jones allowed employees to buy into his partnership.) as we do not have sourcing that confirms he was differentiating himself from other CEOs. However, we can confirm that he allowed employees to buy stock and have included in the next proposed revision.

From: At the time the most profitable firms in and around Missouri had started to go public by selling stock. Ted Jones bucked that trend and kept Edward Jones a partnership instead of a publicly held firm beholden to public shareholders and quarterly profits.
 * Proposed revisions to eleventh and twelfth sentences + citation addition:

To: Differing from other firms that went public, Jones kept the company a privately owned partnership, only allowing employees to purchase shares in the company instead of opening stock purchases to the general public.

Rationale and Placement: Deviating from editorial nature of original sentences. We also propose moving the revised sentence up to follow the second paragraph ("He returned to St. Louis...") of the Biography section to improve sequential narrative.

Jon Gray (talk) 19:14, 29 May 2024 (UTC)