Talk:Elizabeth Olsen/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 20:11, 22 May 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 20:11, 22 May 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Per MOS:ORDER, hatnotes should go right below the short description.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 02:01, 28 May 2021 (UTC)


 * "Award among other awards" sounds repetitive. Maybe "accolades"?
 * ✅ KyleJoan talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)

Early life and education

 * "in musical theatre camp" "in a musical theatre camp"
 * I'm not sure this holds the same meaning. The reference does not specify that it was one camp; I think the intention was to generally say she spent time attending camp the way people would say they went to sleep-away camp as children. I also believe the appropriate phrasing is at camp as opposed to in camp, so I made the change. I hope this suffices. KyleJoan talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
 * This source (#12) does not mention Campbell Hall School.
 * I replaced the Marie Claire ref with The Hollywood Reporter, but I couldn't find a source that verifies for what grades she was there, so I removed that part. KyleJoan talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Shouldn't "Off-Broadway" be written as off-Broadway in the article?
 * ✅ KyleJoan talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)

Career

 * Distribute the 3 references after Endgame.
 * ✅ KyleJoan talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
 * "comedy drama" "comedy-drama"
 * ✅ KyleJoan talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Distribute the sources after "slyly sympathetic".
 * ✅ KyleJoan talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
 * The references after "respective reviews" should be swapped (NPR before Vox).
 * ✅ KyleJoan talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)

Personal life and acting credits

 * "Olsen stated" sounds off and the grammar tool I'm using marks it as an error - reword?
 * I changed the phrasing to neutrally state that she has been an atheist since the quote already lets readers know that she made a statement about it. KyleJoan talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Change "Girl In Car" to simply "Girl in car" per MoS.
 * ✅ Chompy Ace 02:03, 28 May 2021 (UTC)


 * Other than that, the one-paragraph sentence and the filmography table look good.

Awards and nominations

 * WP:SMALLTEXT says the text font should not be made small in tables. For accessibility purposes, I suggest making the small notes actual notes.
 * ✅ KyleJoan talk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)