Talk:Elizabeth Olsen/GA1
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 20:11, 22 May 2021 (UTC)
Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 20:11, 22 May 2021 (UTC)
Infobox and lead[edit]
- Per MOS:ORDER, hatnotes should go right below the short description.
- Done Chompy Ace 02:01, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
- "Award among other awards" sounds repetitive. Maybe "accolades"?
Early life and education[edit]
- "in musical theatre camp" → "in a musical theatre camp"
- I'm not sure this holds the same meaning. The reference does not specify that it was one camp; I think the intention was to generally say she spent time attending camp the way people would say they went to sleep-away camp as children. I also believe the appropriate phrasing is
at camp
as opposed toin camp
, so I made the change. I hope this suffices. KyleJoantalk 02:43, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
- I'm not sure this holds the same meaning. The reference does not specify that it was one camp; I think the intention was to generally say she spent time attending camp the way people would say they went to sleep-away camp as children. I also believe the appropriate phrasing is
- This source (#12) does not mention Campbell Hall School.
- Shouldn't "Off-Broadway" be written as off-Broadway in the article?
Career[edit]
- Distribute the 3 references after Endgame.
- "comedy drama" → "comedy-drama"
- Distribute the sources after "slyly sympathetic".
- The references after "respective reviews" should be swapped (NPR before Vox).
Personal life and acting credits[edit]
- "Olsen stated" sounds off and the grammar tool I'm using marks it as an error - reword?
- Change "Girl In Car" to simply "Girl in car" per MoS.
- Done Chompy Ace 02:03, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
- Other than that, the one-paragraph sentence and the filmography table look good.
Awards and nominations[edit]
- WP:SMALLTEXT says the text font should not be made small in tables. For accessibility purposes, I suggest making the small notes actual notes.[Note 1]
References[edit]
- All 92/92 sources are archived.
- #20 is missing an author.
- #23, #68, #74, and #76 are missing access-dates.
- Links to Vulture should go to Vulture (website) per WP:NOTBROKEN.
- Done Chompy Ace 01:59, 28 May 2021 (UTC)
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