Talk:Elle-Máijá Tailfeathers

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Peer Review
Hi! This is a very good first draft of your article. I made a few edits, mostly just internally linking a lot of words/phrases to other wikipedia articles, but also a few typos (for more info feel free to look at the page's history section). I was going to suggest that you use her surname (Tailfeathers) instead of her full name everywhere because that's how most wikipedia articles are; however, my partner (who is Algonquian) pointed out to me that many First Nations' names are more like titles so you would use the full name throughout the entire thing. So, I don't know if using her full name in every instance was intentional and that information was something you already took into consideration, but use your best judgement for the situation. If you can, I would suggest trying to find out her birthday, or at least her birth year, and putting it in brackets beside where her name first appears in the article. If not I'm sure it's fine. Near the end of your first section, the last sentence of the second last paragraph says "Her film and activist pursuits focus on issues that directly relate to and affect indigenous women and communities." and then the first sentence of the next paragraph states, "Elle-Máijá Tailfeathers is active in advocating for issues affecting First Nations communities." These two sentences seem very similar so I would suggest trying to combine the two somehow or just cut the second sentence altogether and add the final sentence of that section ("In 2011, she was arrested for a participating in a peaceful blockade at the entrance of a drilling site in the Blood Reserve in Alberta.") to the end of the former paragraph.

Finally, the filmography has quite a lot of information in it, so I might suggest organizing it into a table (though I'm not sure where to add in the information like "with Terreane Derrick", so it's really up to you), maybe something like this:

Overall I think it's a really interesting and informative article, and I hope some of my suggestions can be of some help to you. CumulonimbusCat (talk) 21:17, 9 October 2015 (UTC)