Talk:Expensive tissue hypothesis

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This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 15 January 2019 and 25 April 2019. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Dvernet, Faisha S. Peer reviewers: KatLese, Mmantovani.

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Ben's Peer Review
1. I would suggest that you have it formatted a little more Wikipedia-like, with a table of contents and sections defined by horizontal lines and such. That doesn't have to do with the quality of the writing, but it's just the standard Wikipedia format, so your page might benefit from it.

2. I would consider hyperlinking certain phrases or people to other Wikipedia pages if they have them. Ex: Both Aiello and Wheeler have Wikipedia pages you could hyperlink.

3. Solid overview section, easy to understand. You probably don't need to say in parenthesis "(specifically in human evolution)". You could probably just replace it with something like ", and is generally applied to human evolution."

4. For your section on "Original Paper", it is all clear and easy to understand, but it might be too little. Maybe you could add stuff about (a) previous hypotheses and how they were refuted, (b) how Wheeler and Aiello came to that conclusion as opposed to just saying "they found that...", (c) the ramifications that this had.

5. For your section on "Further Research", I like the references to several studies. However, numerous times, you mention "the debate" without really elaborating on why some people don't believe in the Expensive Tissue Hypothesis. As such, I would explain the other side of the issue as well. Maybe point out certain holes in the ETH, or reference studies that go against it. It's a hypothesis, meaning that it is not proven. So, explain why it isn't proven yet.

6. Maybe add some pictures to represent the hypothesis, or of Aiello and/or Wheeler. Again, not necessary, but it can't hurt to give the article some color and visuals. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Blgoldberg4 (talk • contribs) 21:23, 11 November 2018 (UTC)