Talk:Flatline

Wiki Education assignment: Foundations II
— Assignment last updated by Lynn.nguyen2 (talk) 17:56, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Foundations II 2023 proposed edits
Add information about survivors of cardiac arrest

Add information about other causes of cardiac arrest/ flatlining (i.e. natural causes)

Add information about DNR regarding treatment of flatline

Add section about electroencephalogram flatline (causes, diagnosis, consequences, imaging)

Add section about media's uses (i.e. movies, tv shows, music, etc.) of flatline

Add history section

Add research section

Differential diagnoses — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cool Pharmacy (talk • contribs) 22:24, 25 July 2023 (UTC)

Improve and update overall writing of article Dguan1 (talk) 22:17, 25 July 2023 (UTC)


 * Our group has reviewed all the references and references 4 and 14 were duplicates and are were consolidated. Now all citations are correctly formatted. Dguan1 (talk) 18:29, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Added back Society and Culture section
Hi we are working on a school wiki project and we added a Society and Culture because we believe this section is relevant to the article topic. It was removed as "clean up" but no explanation on the talk page. We put the Society and Culture section back into the article. Before removing again please let us know why it doesn't belong in the article. Thanks Dguan1 (talk) 18:06, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Goals
Part 1: Yes, the group's edits does substantially improve the article. The article is very organized and displayed different aspects of the topic to provide a very informative article. The group did achieve its overall goals for improvement.

Part 2: The edits are formatted consistent with Wikipedia's manual of style since each reference is correlated with the information provided in the article. In addition, terms that are linked to different wikipedia articles are also displayed in this group's article.

Kmtran (talk) 18:10, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Part 1: Yes, the group has substantially improved the article. I enjoyed how the article went into the history to show how medicine changes over time and I enjoyed the references to pop culture. This shows the depth that the group went into when researching the topics.

Part 2: The article maintains a neutral point of view. This is because the editors focus mainly on facts instead of opinions. They back their findings with reputable references and do not share their personal feelings about the topic.

Mashavod (talk) 18:46, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Part 1: The group's edit significantly improved the article by providing more information about flatline in terms of what it means and its historical and cultural context. Overall, the group did achieve most of its goals but more information can be added to achieve their goal about "information about survivors of cardiac arrest" and "DNR regarding treatment of flatline."

Part 2: When adding information to the article, the group did a great job in using language that was inclusive and nondiscriminatory. They used words like "people" and "character" instead of "patients." Celinetrann (talk) 18:49, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Part 1: The group made edits that brought more aspects and points of view on simple terminology. They laid out the article in a very easy-to-read format and also noted that "flatline" is not only associated with cardiovascular-related incidents. The addition of the Society and Culture portion also emphasizes how modern media can influence terminology in every field. Overall, the article read very well and achieved the initial plans the group made.

Part 2: Yes, the group has provided points verifiable with secondary sources. The group specifically has a section regarding outcomes and sourced articles that are readily available to people who have a technical background or a general basis of studies. Articles being used were ones that are freely available and can be easily found online. They even included medical guidelines as a resource that can give a general overview to any person. Kvalecruz (talk) 21:21, 1 August 2023 (UTC)