Talk:Flor og Fjære

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This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Kilabs. Peer reviewers: Cat Phou, Rachbr95.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 21:19, 17 January 2022 (UTC)

Feedback
Greetings Kila! Good start on an article and fantastic pictures! Just wow! A few concrete pieces of feedback:


 * Check out WP:LEDE for some suggestions on writing on the first paragraphs. Your very nice write-up deviates a bit from the classic encyclopedic tone. You should probably not start with "only a short..." but instead do the more traditional Flog og Fjære is an island..."
 * In a related sense, you need to be careful to maintain both a neutral point of view (not to excited!) and also an encyclopedic tone (WP:TONE) which means it's should be written in a formal way. Not too narrative. Not to informal, etc.
 * I wouldn't bold words outside of the lede.
 * Try to work on the references using the tags. You can find details on Help:Referencing for beginners.
 * Try to find more references to establish notability. At the moment, you've got some good references but they mostly seem to be pretty close to the subject. Books, magazines, newspapers, and journals, are all useful.

I would work on the tons and references and, when you're feeling good about the improvements, go ahead and move the article in the "(Article)" namespace. Good luck! — m a k o ๛  23:59, 23 October 2015 (UTC)

Feedback

 * User:Kilabs Looks really good! Made just a few minor grammar edits and added a source; let me know what you think. Overall it seems like you have good sources and have maintained a neutral point of view. Great layout too!
 * My only concern is that the sources are mostly just websites created to attract tourists, instead of any type of scholarly articles or better sources. --Rachbr95 (talk) 00:11, 30 October 2015 (UTC)