Talk:Food hubs

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Initial Feedback
Nice start. Good tone and I think you've done a good job of using citations to establish WP:V. I had a few suggestions:


 * More citations from reliable sources (academic journals, encyclopedia articles, etc) would help establish notability of the subject. I think it's particularly important to involve more different sources since you're relying pretty heavily on the USDA right now. Obviously, the USDA is a great source, but more diversity in sources would be good.
 * Your article is missing a WP:LEDE.
 * The long quote seems a little unusual in the first line of the first paragraph. See WP:QUOTE for details. If you write a lede this might solve thep roblem.
 * The last section on types seems a little weird. I would either find some other way of formatting this (maybe with subsections?) or rewrite this as a paragraph.

That's it for now. I think this article is pretty good shape and can move over soon. — m a k o ๛  17:44, 20 October 2016 (UTC)

Alex's Feedback
Great article for providing broad/general information on food hubs.

Suggestions for improvement: 1. Consider re-organizing the first paragraph to include some of the integral information in the last few sentences toward the beginning e.g. the sentences: "A defining characteristic of food hubs is source identification, a food safety and marketing benefit, that allows consumers to trace the origin of the products they buy.[4] One of the primary goals of food hubs is to give small and medium sized farmers access to larger-volume markets or additional markets. They are also considered a solution to filling gaps in food systems infrastructure, such as transportation, product storage, and product processing.[5]" would be better opening sentences because they establish a foundation for reader relation and understanding. Because the topic is likely obscure to most people, it might be better to start narrow and go broad, if that makes sense. 2. I think you should bullet point the three types of food hubs like you did in the core functions section. 3. Do we know how the first food hubs operated and the specific ways in which they've evolved? Could be a later topic for exploration. 4. Each of these points could be explored further: Conservation, sustainability, healthy food access, and supporting local farmers. Maybe something another contributor might consider expanding on at a later time. Dowliad (talk) 16:02, 28 October 2016 (UTC)

Chris's Feedback
Solid stuff! I've learned a ton from the articles I've read so far. I just finished copy editing--let me know if you have questions about any of my changes.

I agree with Alex on reorganizing the intro. I'd stick the term's history at the bottom and bump up the sentences outlining the hubs' goals. I'd also consider adding a new section documenting some existing food hubs and their work. Since many readers might be unfamiliar with this concept, examples of major players in action could help them associate the business model with something tangible. (Just make sure to avoid writing such a section in an overly promotional manner!) Cyrrona (talk) 01:28, 29 October 2016 (UTC)

Cassandra's Feedback
I agree with the feedback previously given, but I would ask that the benefits listed could warrant their own section. Why are those benefits important to those that participate in a food hub? Also, how does one go about joining a food hub? Can any farm participate? Are there standards to be met? That might be extensive for you to elaborate on, but certainly would make this article more helpful for the novice. Mwestmillennial (talk) 02:06, 30 October 2016 (UTC)