Talk:Freaky Green Eyes

comments
Good start. I like the use of the break out box!
 * Lead: Your leading summary is a bit short, and should mention in the second paragraph some of the themes. It needs to adequately describe the entire article.
 * Plot: I've gone through this and done some copy editing but you need to do more. Make sure your verbs are all in the appropriate tense. I'd use present tense. Make life simple.  you don't need to wikilink common terms like mother, father sister and stepbrother.
 * themes: this is a good beginning, but it needs more detail. There also needs to be more discussion of Freaky as Franky's alter ego, and what this means.
 * review section: this is too short. What do reviewers say about the themes, about Oates generally, about this story particularly?  What do they identify as weaknesses and strengths?  There is a lot written about this book, so I'm sure you can find things.
 * Citations and bibliography. Be sure your entries are properly formatted. Wikipedia doesn't really care which format you use, as long as whatever format you use is consistent.  I'd prefer you use MLA or Turabian for this article.  It would be more in keeping with other literature articles.

Keep working on this. I'll check back on it later tomorrow when I work up grading. Auntieruth55 (talk) 19:12, 20 April 2010 (UTC)

Hi! I think your article looks pretty good, but I agree with some of the above suggestions. You have some grammatical and syntax errors throughout that can be easily fixed. :) Additionally, make sure you keep everything in the same tense so it is easier to understand. I think that you have a lot of great information, but you could maybe expand a little bit.  For example, you mention that Oates originally wanted this book to parallel the Simpson case, but then it closely followed the Ramsey case; maybe you could add a little bit about how it does mirror the latter?  Also, you could probably discuss how/if this book fits into a literary movement or some of the literary devices used throughout.  Overall, however, I think this is a great review :) Santolinek (talk) 00:55, 21 April 2010 (UTC)

Peer Review
This makes me want to read the book! I liked much of the article and thought it was interesting, however I do feel that there is some work that can be done to improve it. Some grammar problems, minor, but go back through and make sure that everything is correct. Also, can you add a section about the Author? Doesn't have to be very large, just a few sentences, I know that Oates is a writer who is out of teh ordinary and writes odd and sometimes dark stories (Which this one would fall under) but many other readers may not know this. Also since the two cases, Simpson and Ramsaey (sp?) are mentioned I agree that the parrallels should be mentioned. Find more on the reviews as well, maybe suumarize a book review, try to find one for the book and one agaisnt the book (it will give your article a more nuetral p.o.v. But overall this is written very well and I like the topic! Megzie113 (talk) 12:52, 22 April 2010 (UTC)

This article seems to be really well written. I have never read this book but I am going to read it now due to the interesting themes and plot that are listed in the article. I still see a few minor grammar and punctuation errors but no major problems. Other than these small mistakes the appearance and structure of the article seems to be good. I would also like to see a section discussing the author and some of her other published works to learn more about her writing style. Overall great job on the article. (garvdog30 (talk) 01:33, 27 April 2010 (UTC))