Talk:General Leo/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 14:35, 2 May 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Pokelego999 (talk · contribs) 12:43, 17 May 2024 (UTC)

Will take this one in the coming days. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 12:43, 17 May 2024 (UTC)

Six GA Criteria
1. Article is well-written.

2. No OR, all info is cited in the article.

3. Coverage is broad in depth and focus. Shows multiple aspects of the character.

4. Article appears neutral, and does not appear to hold a significantly negative nor positive stance on the subject.

5. Article appears stable. Does not appear to have had any major vandalism occur.

6. Article uses one fair use image with proper rationale.

Lead
-Looks good

Appearances
-Looks good

Conception and development
-Looks good

Critical reception
-"expecting originally how charismatic he was that Leo would be an available party member in the game." I'd reword since this is a confusingly worded run-on. -I'd reword "The staff of Futabanet Manga Plus meanwhile cited him as one of the franchise's poignant examples of self-sacrifice in a retrospective," to The staff of Futabanet Manga Plus, in a retrospective, meanwhile cited him as one of the franchise's poignant examples of self-sacrifice," for clarity -"and how much it left a lasting impact on players who regretted his death." I'd cut "who regretted his death" since the point already comes across well enough without it. -"as a last light of hope against him." I'd change him to Kefka for clarity. -"more melancholy" I'd change to "more melancholic" but this is mostly personal preference -"Kawachi upon controlling the character and seeing his portrait admitted they were shocked, moreso than by his death, and stated "a man's charm isn't always in his face!"" This whole bit to me really doesn't feel like it's saying much. Definitely feels more like a yoinked minor comment than anything too constructive.
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 * I tried rewording this a bit...it's kinda a visceral reaction he goes into a bit on in the article, and the only reaction we have to his appearance outside of retonauts (and honestly a rarity overall given I don't think any of the other characters got that same response). Without such the 1Up bit feels a little out of place to boot.

Overall
-Looks good, ping me once the above are addressed. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 20:15, 18 May 2024 (UTC)
 * I tried to address everything. Lemme know if there's anything else to fix! Sorry for the wait.--Kung Fu Man (talk) 15:18, 19 May 2024 (UTC)
 * Should be good. Happy to pass. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 18:02, 19 May 2024 (UTC)