Talk:Hazel Sewell

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Add an external link section at the bottom, after you references and link he imdb page as well as her biography written on the Walt Disney website. The opening paragraph needs something that catches the readers eye. As I was reading I saw you mentioned that she was the first woman in animation industry to serve as a head of a major division, maybe if you mention that in the opening paragraph the reader would be interested in the article very quick. I also noticed that she was the art director for Snow White and the Seven Dwarfs and the artist for Plane Crazy. Those are both very notable works, I think that you should have an Awards and Nominations section, although I know that Snow White and the Seven Dwarfs has won and has been nominated for a few different awards. You do not have to make a table for the awards but just a few points that the movies won awards and what is the name of the award and what year. I acknowledge that she personally did not win those awards you could mention in the section that she personally did not win those awards but these movies she participated in making won and were nominated for these awards. In the career section you could add two sections, one of the legacy and success of Plane Crazy and another section of the legacy and success of Snow White and the Seven Dwarfs. I found an article that you can maybe use in the career section or link it in the external links section that talked all about the ink and paint department at Walt Disney Studios, it also stated that the department was predominantly female, just type the ink and paint department Walt Disney Studio and you will find it. Overall, your article is well done, informative and it really highlights in her career section how hard it was to work in such an industry that was male dominated and her hard work was not appreciated by othersHarpeet Jessica (talk) 19:17, 31 October 2018 (UTC)

I think your article provides a lot of good information especially her contributions to Walt Disney Studios. However maybe include more citations under your "career" heading, just so it eliminates the appearance of plagiarism. also possibly add another source? you may not want to run the risk of your article being taken down for having only 4 sources. also possibly break up your career section a little more to highlight the impact of plane crazy and snow white and the seven dwarfs and the contributions she made toward those films, this is possibly where you can add more citations. also maybe reword slightly your opening sentence from "hazel sewell was the first head of walt disney studios ink and paint department" to something along the lines of "hazel sewell was the first women to be head of walt disney studio's ink and paint department". it would make it more appealing to your readers. overall i enjoyed reading about hazell Sewell. Tbcbab (talk) 20:06, 31 October 2018 (UTC)Tbcbab

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