Talk:High-refractive-index polymer

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All of the concerns of my previous review have been sufficiently addressed. The links that I suggested were included along with the few suggestions on making certain points of the page a bit clearer. My reference suggestions were not used but they may have not been extremely helpful.

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This webpage may be slightly difficult for first-time/general users due to the difficult nature of the material. This group though has done a great job in helping define the terms that needed to be used by linking them to their own Wikipedia site. This helped clarify some of the material they talked about. This page gives relevant information to the topic at hand and is overall well done. There is a logical flow to the page that made sense and I would not change the order. Each section contains a sufficient amount of information with the section properties of HRIP a bit lengthy but necessary to get all the important points across. The group did satisfy their stated objectives.

While reading through the page I came across a few typos and a few sentences that were a bit difficult to understand. In the Introduction section the second sentence repeats exactly what the first sentence says and I would suggest getting rid of one of the sentences.

In the Properties of HRIP section the second sentence again sort of repeats what the first sentence says. This time though I would just reword the second sentence to possibly say “Some of these properties are low birefringence, high optical transparency, and thermal stability.” A few other suggestions in this section are in the third paragraph about optical dispersion I would link dispersion to its Wikipedia page. Also in that sentence you are missing the word “at” after the word “look”. Farther down in the paragraph I would link the word “anisotropy” to its Wikipedia page. In the fourth paragraph third sentence the words “is it” need to be switched to “it is”. In the next sentence after that I would reword slightly to say “An example is polyesters, which are considered thermally stable with a degradation temperature of 410 degrees Celsius”

In the Synthesis of HRIP section, I would link step growth polymers to its Wikipedia page.

In the Types of HRIP: intrinsic HRIP section where you talk about phosphorous- containing groups I would reword the second sentence. You say “Thus, phosphorous-containing polymers might be good candidates as HRIPs for optical applications” and I think a better way of getting your point across may be to say something along the lines of “Thus, phosphorous-containing polymers are being researched as potential HRIPs that can be used for optical applications.” In the HRIP nanocomposite section I think the sentence with the equation is not necessary. If they really want to know how to calculate the n they can look up papers to find that out. If you do want to keep the equation in I would define all the different parts of the equation such as what is p.

All of the images on the page look excellent and are positioned in an appropriate way. The only thing that might be a bit hard for readers to understand is in figure 7. The readers may not understand what the squiggly lines off of the oxygens mean. You may want to mention it in the caption to make it clearer. The references look excellent. This webpage satisfies all of the material assigned to us.

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Overall the group did a good job on their site. I was able to learn more about what exactly a HRIP is and why it is an important research area today. A few typos and rewording of sentences need to be done but other than that I found that site interesting. The group even went way above the assigned criteria in including 7 new sections, 9 new images, and 27 new references. (MatChem121 (talk) 14:55, 24 March 2011 (UTC))

Section 1
After re reading my peer review and comparing it to your work, I can see that you adjusted for most all of my concerns. You added a synthesis section, clarified all of the points which you planned, and made the captions and figures more complete. On the other hand, there were many missed opportunities throughout the work where links to other Wikipedia sites would have been appropriate.

Section 2
After reading the page, I think I have a fair understanding of high refractive index polymers: You discussed the relevant properties and how they are achieved/designed. The page may be a bit difficult for a first time or general user to understand, however, unless you link to other Wikipedia pages for some of the technical terms which you mention (ex. Polarizability in intro, Aromatic in properties 3rd paragraph, TGA and DSC should be linked, as should some of the devices where HRIPs are applied CMOS, photoresist).

The page flows fairly logically from a general introduction to discussing relevant properties. Then it briefly lists synthetic routes and shows examples of design principles for intrinsic and composite HRIPs. Finally, applications are discussed. This outline is very good, and helps convey the importance of this material class.

Since each section is setup with a short introduction, it is easy to follow the flow of the page. Each section except the synthesis and issues sections use great detail in their discussion. Since synthesis is very general, it is admissible to link to other sites which go into more detail (as is done in the page). However, the issues section is unfortunately short; it mentions some deficiencies which composite materials face as HRIPs, but I still wonder, for all of the excellent design principles which were discussed above, what is keeping the RI so low? I mean to say that a few more sentences here would greatly help the reader understand why this material class is still the subject of research. (Can one just combine all the above principles haphazardly to make a “super RI” polymer”?

On the other hand, your most important sections are the HRIP properties and Types of HRIP ones. These topics are thoroughly discussed, and deserve the emphasis that they receive.

Your objectives included introducing HRIPs, giving a design background and showing applications. These goals have all been well met in the page, so I think your mission is accomplished.

Also, your images look good, but if they came from a paper, I think you should reference it in the caption.

I see one book in your references and the rest are journals. To me, this is very acceptable. So I think you’ve referenced the necessary literature and have a good feel for this field. Additionally, you’ve met the requirements for 3 new Images, 3 new sections, and 8 references.

One thing which I would like to mention is about the English work. There are a few typos/places where the wording doesn’t flow in the page, and the sentence structure is in some places repetitive (ex. in the issues section you start two subsequent sections with “because”). This is a minor detail.

Section 3
This page is a good introduction to the meaning of “what is a high refractive index polymer.” It introduces the field including properties, synthesis, design principles, issues and applications which are relevant to HRIPs. You do a very good job describing the important properties and the design principles for HRIPs, and I think this will be a great contribution to Wikipedia. The images which you provide enhance your story by showing structures of molecules and devices which are relevant to these materials. The final polishing improvements would involve adding more links to Wikipedia sites and perhaps adding a few more sentences to the issues section. (Aromaticmoleculessmell (talk) 16:23, 23 March 2011 (UTC))

Objectives
Your objectives include: describing HRIPs in terms of their desired properties, routes to achieve these, and the challenges in reaching them. You will describe why polymeric materials are desirable, and what kind of applications benefit from these materials. Your goals are clear and seem to fit in with Wikipedia’s goals. One relevant (and short) section that I think would benefit this discussion would be listing the polymerization routes that are relevant to HRIPs, since these routes may dictate which functionalities the materials can ultimately have, and therefore may limit their refractive index. Although no other Wikipedia sites seem to directly duplicate any of your proposed sections, there are a handful of pages with relevant information including: Fresnel equations; Refractive index; Transparent;Waveguide (optics). The length of your outline seems to be appropriate as well.

Outline
In your introduction, you say HRIP’s have N >= 1.5, but many ceramics and hard materials have n > 2, so what determines how high a refractive index is needed (perhaps reference Fresnel equations here?) in an application, and how high n must be to qualify as “high RI”. Under the properties section, you list some characteristics desirable for HRIP materials including: High n, high clarity, high transparency (please distinguish this from clarity), and low birefringence (a good link place to birefringence wiki page). Although I am very glad that you will discuss the equations which help describe refractive index, I believe that you should also add: required transparency wavelengths depend on the application, but usu. a 400-900 nm window is good for visible light applications; It is important for these materials to have a high thermal, (chemical) and UV stability, depending on their use; finally, it is important for these materials to have good solubility (each paper that I read listed a bunch of solvents and how well their polymer dissolved in it, so this must be a big deal). I assume that you will discuss why each property is desirable.

Additionally, I think that it is important to breifly include a description about what factors influence polymeric RI including, as Li et al. say: “Actually, it has been well established that the refractive index of one polymer is the result of competition among several factors, including molecular polarizability, chain flexibility, molecular geometry and orientation in the polymer backbone” (Li, Polymer, 51, 3851-3858 (2010); Han, J. Appl. Polym. Sci, 77, 2172-2177 (2000)).

In the issues section, I think you should mention how tight molecular packing (which should enhance n), anisotropy, and processing interplay instead of just the processing part. Also, since poor processability is a problem, how are these materials processed? (solution processed, I assume?)

In the intrinsic HRIP section, why are those particular functional groups/atoms chosen?

Your composite HRIP section looks like it will address important issues.

The application section lists some uses, but hasn’t yet been motivated; your outline is complete and I understand that you will elaborate on how HRIPs are needed in each application.

Your sections flow logically and your discussion is complete and will meet your objectives, clearly describing what HRIPs are, how they’re made and applied and what issues they face.

Image
Your image clearly depicts a polymer with lots of localized conjugation, but labels it as a nanocomposite without mentioning the roll of the structure in interfacing with the second material nor does it mention the material which is incorporated with it. I think that the image’s take-home message is quite weak, but I am quite sure that this is due to time constraints for the outline, so it is excusable. Additionally, I think that either links to relevant sites or a chemical structure table would be nice to show common HRIP moieties with names and a general statement of why they work for HRIPs for the intrinsic HRIP section.

Summary
Overall, your outline looks good and will be an excellent entry for Wikipedia, since it is an important topic that merits this kind of discussion. From your outline I can tell that the important definitions, limitations and applications of HRIPs will be discussed. Additionally, I found that there were a few relevant wikipages which should be linked and a few important points about HRIP design which need to be mentioned. (Aromaticmoleculessmell (talk) 02:46, 17 February 2011 (UTC))

Section 1
Overall I felt like this outline was well done. The objectives section though almost seems like it should be incorporated in your outline (section 2). This may be due to the fact that, itself is in outline form. I was confused when I first looked it over why it seemed to me that you had two outlines. I would perhaps change the objective section to paragraph form just to prevent that type of confusion in the future. I would also perhaps incorporate some of the general ideas listed in your objective section into the actual outline itself. When trying to read your outline I kept flipping back to your objective section to see if you were planning on including a concept I thought would be important in that certain section. This could be avoided by combine the objective outline with your actual outline. With that, the length of your objective section is great and the idea itself will be a welcome addition to Wikipedia. A few sites I would link to are the refractive index site for those who need to refresh their memory of what exactly that is and the Lorentz–Lorenz equation site.

Section 2
The length of the outline is appropriate for a Wikipedia site. All of the subsections are relevant to the topic and the order of how you present each section is logical. In the introduction I would make sure to mention one of the major applications for this material right off the bat. By doing this you will be able to inform people quite quickly why this is important to everyday life. In the introduction you also mention that many devices need higher refractive indices, what is the desired range? After the introduction I might add a small section on the history of these types of polymers. Through my brief research I found a few names mentioned and how their contributions lead to the emergence of this field (Matsuda, Weibel, etc…). The section on Properties of HRIP looks good. One thing to watch out for is you mention in your objective outline that you want to show equations. This in itself is good but I see that you mentioned in the actual outline the Lorentz-Lorenz Equation, which already has its own site, and thus you may be repeating the same information. The section on Types of HRIP and the subsections Intrinsic HRIP and HRIP nanocomposite look good. (For the fourth point down under HRIP nanocomposite I think you wanted n not no.) In the applications section you have sufficient enough examples.

The image that was created as far as I can see is appropriately done with chemdraw and looks nice. Without reading much of the text I can tell it is a polymer. What I am unclear about is what makes it an inorganic hybrid? Or is this just the polmer used to make the matrix? You may want to show how the whole naocomposite system looks in another picture. If that was not what you were going for in this picture then just ignore what I just typed.

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The references are diverse in that you have a book, a review, a thesis. More references are needed a few that I came across that may be helpful are Beercroft, L. L.; Ober, C. K. J.M.S.-Pure Appl. Chem. 1997, A34(4), 573 and Flaim, T.; Wang, Y.; Mercado, R. SPIE Proceedings of Optical Systems Design, 2003. Overall Comments

Overall Comments
Overall, this outline was well done. The outline was very detailed and the way the page is going to be outlined is logical. Some improvement would be to combine some of your objective outline with your actual outline, possibly add a history section, and add a few more references. With those few points your outline will be even better.MatChem121 (talk) 02:52, 18 February 2011 (UTC)