Talk:In My City/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kailash29792 (talk · contribs) I will be reviewing this within the next 24 hours. Kailash29792 (talk) 13:27, 25 March 2014 (UTC)

Lead

 * Seems all well, but there is one bare reference in the third para. I don't even think it needs to be there, as this states that the lead section does not need sources.
 * ✅: Removed.— Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)


 * Although the lead has three paragraphs (which is suitable enough), is it possible to extend the first and third para's? If not, never mind.
 * ✅: Extended a bit.— Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)


 * "one group complemented Chopra's vocals, while the other group criticised the generic sound of the song." Who are the groups?
 * ✅: Tweaked.— Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)

Critical reception

 * The majority of reviews, such as Janhvi Patel's review and The Hindu do not contain any quotations by the reviewers. I believe some can be added.
 * I think its has adequate quotes.— Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)


 * Is Bollywood Life a reliable source? If yes, then it can stay.
 * Yes, It is reliable. Its a part of Zee News and DNA.— Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)

Commercial performance

 * "In My City" was a commercially successful in India. What grammar is that?


 * I feel this section needs only a little more minor copyediting.
 * ✅: Tweaked.— Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)

Promotions

 * Is there any better name for this section? Or is this the best that can be? Or will "Marketing" do?


 * Are you intending on creating an article on DJ Nash? If not, please remove the link as it is red.
 * ✅: Removed redlinks and i didn't found a better name as Chopra was promoting. So, i think it fair.— Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)

Music video

 * A behind-the-scenes video documenting the making of "In My City" was shown during an NFL game on 13 September 2012. "behind-the-scenes" sounds colloquial, and the term is not in the supporting source. Also, is there any alternative for the term "shown" which sounds juvenile?


 * The video (directed by Joseph Kahn) was released on 29 January 2013. I'd prefer The video, directed by Joseph Kahn, was released on 29 January 2013.


 * I would like the term BMW linked, as it refers to a fancy car that is not known to just everyone.
 * ✅: Tweaked.— Prashant 11:27, 26 March 2014 (UTC)

Overall
These are the only comments I have. Once they have been resolved, the article can pass. Other minor issues have been taken care of by me. Kailash29792 (talk) 08:54, 26 March 2014 (UTC)


 * Final verdict:
 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

Congratulations Prashant! I'm also happy that I could finish this review in less than 24 hours. Kailash29792 (talk) 12:00, 26 March 2014 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail: