Talk:Joseph Goebbels/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jonas Vinther (talk · contribs) 23:17, 17 June 2015 (UTC)

Will review this right after I get home from work tomorrow. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 23:17, 17 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Okay, I'm home. Let's do this! :)

First part

 * "Paul Joseph Goebbels was born in Rheydt, an industrial town south of Mönchengladbach near Düsseldorf" - mention date✅
 * "Both parents" - tweak to "Both of his parents"✅
 * "His father Fritz was a clerk in a factory" - tweak to "His father Fritz was a factory clerk"✅
 * "his mother Katharina (née Odenhausen)" - shouldn't "née" be written in italics?✅
 * "and Maria (1910–1949); the last married the German filmmaker Max W. Kimmich in 1938" - tweak to "and Maria (1910–1949), who married the German filmmaker Max W. Kimmich in 1938"✅
 * "Goebbels suffered from ill health during his childhood" - curb "his"✅
 * "He had a deformed right foot (clubfoot) which turned inwards" - remove brackets and link clubfoot in deformed right foot bit✅
 * "due to a congenital deformity" - link Congenital disorder✅
 * "He was educated at a Christian Gymnasium" - write "Goebbels" when it's a new paraprah and also since you used "he" in the previous sentence✅
 * "His parents initially hoped that he would become a Catholic priest" - does Manvell & Fraenkel 2010 mention whether Goebbels had any interest in this or what his thoughts about becomming a preist was? If so, seems worth adding ✅
 * "Perhaps in compensation for his physical disabilities" - this sentence strikes me as very much VAGUE
 * "He wrote a semi-autobiographical novel, Michael, a three-part work of which only Parts I and III have survived" - what year did he write the book? I see it was published by the NSDAP in 1929, but surely he must written it before that. Right? If not, it seems strange to add a 1929 event in the "Early life" section.
 * "At the University of Heidelberg, he wrote his doctoral thesis on Wilhelm von Schütz" - again, I strongly recommend using "Goebbels" when it's a new paragraph ✅
 * "and indicated a growing anti-Semitism" - curb the "a" bit ✅
 * "Goebbels stated the "enchantment [was] ruined". He continued to see her on and off until 1927" - tweak this to "Goebbels stated the "enchantment [was] ruined", but nevertheless continued to see her on and off until 1927"
 * "Hitler was sentenced to prison, and was released on 20 December 1924" - tweak to "Hitler was sentenced to five years in prison, but released on 20 December 1924" ✅
 * "and was given party badge number 8762" - tweak to "becoming member #8762 ✅
 * "to a meeting at Bamberg" - tweak to "to a special conference in Bamberg" ✅
 * "I no longer fully believe in Hitler. That's the terrible thing: my inner support has been taken away" - mention this is a diary quote ✅ Kershaw does not specifically say this, so I have changed the cite to Longerich.
 * "and by 1930 there was a dramatic increase in unemployment" - tweak to "and by 1930 there was a dramatic increase in unemployment and run-away inflation" ❌ The inflationary period was in the 1920s, not 1930s. Hyperinflation in the Weimar Republic.
 * "with the slogan "the Führer over Germany" - I believe the slogan was "Hitler over Germany" ❌ Both Thacker (p.127) and Kershaw (p.227) say "the Führer over Germany".

Second part
Okay, will take a short break and continue at "Propaganda Minister" when I return. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 14:48, 18 June 2015 (UTC)
 * "unless they were on the approved list" - tweak to unless they were approved
 * "On 2 September 1939 (a few days after the start of the war)" - tweak to "On 2 September 1939 (a day after the start of the war)" or something similar ✅
 * "Albert Speer, Hitler's architect and Minister for Armaments and War Production" - tweak to "Albert Speer, Hitler's architect and later Minister for Armaments and War Production" ✅
 * "and crucifixes were removed from state buildings" - like Bormann's article, mention Hitler later reversed this policy in a note and use the same source (Rees & Kershaw 2012) ✅
 * "Still Goebbels was well aware" - add comma after "Still" ✅
 * "for troops on the eastern front" - "eastern front" should be capitalized and linked
 * "In actuality the defence of areas" - add comma before "actuality" ✅ I think you meant "after" :)
 * "Göring's Luftwaffe attempted to retaliate" - no need to italicize "Luftwaffe" per WP:COMMON ✅
 * "to inject his six children with morphine so that when they were unconscious, an ampule of cyanide could be crushed in each of their mouths" - tweak to "to inject his six children with morphine so that when they were unconscious, an ampule of cyanide could then be crushed in each of their mouths" ✅
 * "and were given a coup de grâce immediately afterwards" - no need to italicize coup de grâce ✅
 * Article does not mention he received the Golden Party Badge. Add it somewhere. That is all I can find. If the rest of these issues are fixed, I'm passing the article. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 19:07, 18 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I have completed the tasks except for adding the Golden Party Badge, as it's not mentioned in any of the books I have here. Perhaps Kierzek has a source? -- Diannaa (talk) 22:06, 18 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I don't know for a fact he received the Golden Party Badge; I just saw his article was in the recipients category so I assumed so. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 23:46, 18 June 2015 (UTC)
 * I don't recall reading it specifically but will double-check when I get home. Clearly he did receive it as he is shown wearing it in the photo we have up in the section: "Propagandist in Berlin", giving a speech in Berlin (1934). Kierzek (talk) 13:22, 19 June 2015 (UTC)
 * To be honest, I think a Bundesarchiv image of him wearing it is just as good as a source. I'm passing this article, excellent job both of you. :) Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 16:44, 19 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Jonas, thank you for your time and the review; and thanks to Diannaa, my cohort. Cheers, Kierzek (talk) 17:32, 19 June 2015 (UTC)