Talk:Julie Ertz/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 08:40, 28 June 2018 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this one, will post review in the next day or so. Kosack (talk) 08:40, 28 June 2018 (UTC)

Initial review:

Infobox

 * Source needed for her full name and height.
 * The manual of style at WikiProject Football/Players would suggest not to use hyphens when displaying national youth teams in the infobox, I.e. U-20 > U20.

Lead

 * Per WP:PRECISELANG, avoid using terms such as "currently" that can become out of date. She plays as would be more suitable.
 * I think it's typical for the club to come before the country when listing who the player represents.
 * Link friendly to Exhibition game.
 * Link final to 2015 FIFA Women's World Cup Final.
 * Currently used again in the third paragraph, try and swap that out.

Early life

 * Perhaps I'm missing it, but what's the source for her being raised by her sister?
 * "Johnston sisters switched to play for Sereno Soccer Club in Phoenix Julie played for the 92's and Melanie played for the 90's.", this sentence needs a break somewhere, perhaps a comma after Phoenix would help?
 * I'm assuming 92's and 90's refer to the year the players were born?
 * The comma after professional teams isn't needed.
 * The birthplaces don't match between the Infobox and Early Life.

Santa Clara Broncos

 * "Ertz started all 21 games which led the Broncos with nine goals and four assists", sentence is a bit confusing, did the 21 games or the goals and assists lead the team?
 * NSCAA is linked in the second paragraph but there is a mention in the first, link the first mention instead.

Chicago Red Stars

 * Link Chicago Red Stars, first time the team is mentioned outside the lead.
 * I've never seen that win-loss record template used before, is that standard for US women's articles?
 * Link FIFA Women's World Cup to the relevant World Cup page.
 * "She made 11 appearances for the Red Stars during the 2015 season, playing 990 minutes. The Red Stars finished second in the regular season with a 8–3–9 record and advanced to the playoffs.", what's the source for these two sentences?
 * Third paragraph is unsourced.
 * First sentence of the fourth paragraph is unsourced.

Youth national teams

 * Pipe Home Depot Center to StubHub Center.
 * " In the qualifying tournament, she played three times with three goals." Source?
 * Comment: In that tournament, the national team of which she participated in were qualified to the main tournament automatically so that will be corrected. Iggy (Swan) 15:15, 29 June 2018 (UTC)
 * Link England women's national under-23 football team.

First caps

 * Link national team to the USWNT.
 * Link Scotland to Scotland women's national football team.
 * Canada women's team is linked in the third paragraph but not the second. Move the link to the first mention.
 * Does qualifying need the capital letter in the fourth paragraph?

2015 FIFA Women's World Cup

 * Link French and Japanese women's teams.

Honours

 * First honour is unsourced.

Infobox

 * Still need a source for her height.
 * The birthplaces don't match in the Infobox and the Early Life.

Honours

 * "MAC Hermann Trophy Semi-finalist", I'm not acquainted with American sports that much but is being a semi-finalist an honour?