Talk:Karlie Kloss/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Schierbecker (talk · contribs) 23:36, 29 March 2024 (UTC)

She graduated from my high school the year before me. I will look this over later tonight. Schierbecker (talk) 23:36, 29 March 2024 (UTC)


 * @Schierbecker Thanks for taking up this review. I have tried to make as many changes as possible so that the workload during GAR is significantly lesser. Anyways, I expect to see some comments from you soon and I hope we can wrap this up soon( and successfully). Regards MSincccc (talk) 00:41, 30 March 2024 (UTC)


 * The lead is a bit short. It makes her out to be just an ordinary model. What superlatives can be said about her? I thought she was at one time one of the highest paid models in the world.

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 * Her family has German, Danish, and Polish ancestry. I failed to verify this from the citation given.
 * Kloss found herself in the middle of a legal dispute when her former agency, Elite Model Management, sued Next Management for allegedly stealing its star by offering her "improper compensation" to sign; Elite Model Management felt they were responsible for launching her career. Who is "its star" in this sentence? To sign what? They poached Kloss?
 * Lots of old information presented in the present tense that is probably no longer true. e.g. Kloss is the face of the Marc Jacobs fragrance Lola.

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 * She became a muse for fashion designer John Galliano, Not sure what this means, but it's uncited. And so is the next sentence.
 * wl tear sheet
 * Just before the Victoria's Secret Fashion in 2012, Kloss cut her long hair into a bob which is famously called the "Karlie". By who?
 * Two Forbes sources don't seem to be reliable sources. See: WP:FORBESCON.
 * By 2018, the camp had expanded to include "50 coding camps in 25 US cities, teaching 1,000 girls to code". Who is this quote attributed to?
 * In collaboration with Momofuku Milk Bar, Kloss created a special recipe called Karlie's Kookies sold in DKNY Soho during Fashion's Night Out in New York City, with proceeds benefiting hungry children around the world (through FEED Projects). She called it a "Perfect 10 Kookie" because for every tin of cookies sold, 10 meals were donated to starving children all over the world. That's a lot of words for a one-off event.
 * Kloss is also an investor, with the Daily Front Row reporting in 2020 that Kloss was one of a group of high profile investors who purchased the fashion magazine W. This statement need not be attributed to Daily Front Row. Tighten wording. Did she purchase it in 2020 or was it merely reported in 2020.
 * Lots of uncited content. For example, She has been in advertisements for Rebecca Taylor, Jean Paul Gaultier, Donna Karan, Nina Ricci, Chloé, Lacoste, Sportmax, Alexander McQueen, Yves Saint Laurent, Elie Saab, Dolce & Gabbana, Gap, Bally Shoe, Bergdorf Goodman, Pringle of Scotland, Dior, Hermès, Oscar de la Renta, Sonia Rykiel, Aquascutum, Topshop, Eryn Brinie, Uniqlo, Omnia Jade, Lord & Taylor, Barneys New York, American Eagle, Victoria's Secret PINK, and Adidas.

Thank you for your efforts thus far. Based on this cursory review of the article I am going to quick fail this nomination. Please do continue to work on this. If you want me to re-review this article in the future please drop me a note. Thank you :). Schierbecker (talk) 05:02, 30 March 2024 (UTC) Schierbecker (talk) 05:02, 30 March 2024 (UTC)