Talk:Lager Beer Riot

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Untitled
The "Background" section of this article is pure Howard Zinn garbage, it's written in bad English by a non-native speaker, and it repeats information in the main section. It should be deleted. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 80.33.158.121 (talk) 14:02, 15 December 2009 (UTC)


 * Agreed, in addition to the garbled syntax, the rioters were primarily, perhaps exclusively, German. While Irish Chicagoans of the time had their own grievances, this is out of place here. I'll remove it once I've come up with a better background. Sam Paris (talk) 22:09, 12 October 2010 (UTC)

Additions/Feedback
I enjoyed the new "Consequences" section, the quotes are very useful to the page as a whole. The Introduction section could use a couple more sentences about the page overall. I thought adding the "Formation of the Chicago Police Department" section was interesting and much needed. However, I think that it would be better if it were placed after the Background section. I also deleted part of a sentence in the Background section because of its redundancy and added a sentence in my events section: a quote by Einhorn. -By jennifer.cerer

I think that the "Formation of the Chicago Police Department" is crucial to the article. This level of importance, however, necessitates that the section is further developed. Moreover, I believe that the introduction could be more developed also. Haassr (talk) 22:08, 26 September 2017 (UTC)

Feedback
The organization is better, but there are still redundancies throughout the entire article. A clear outline of sections and content within each section would be helpful in structuring the article. Also, the "Consequences" and "Formation of the Chicago Police Department" may be better combined into one section (under a new name). A wider variety of sources will also help develop the article.

More Feedback / Additions / Encouragement
I continued to add sentences to my Events section of the article. I cleaned it up to the best of my ability, but did not want too much writing to get in the way of the fact that it is a summary of the events during the Lager Beer Riot. All of my sources are credible. Also... I enjoyed the cleaning up that was done in the Background and Consequences sections. I think it was a good idea to move the formation of the Chicago Police Department into the Background instead of making it is own section. After all, this is not a wiki page on the formation of the Chicago PD, it is about a riot.

I deleted the Rise of the Chicago Police Department section, and moved the sections existing content to the background section. I copyedited the page, wrote about the consequences of the riot, and added content about the formation of the Chicago Police department (making clear this occurred before the riot).

Not Quite Accurate
The section on the police dept. needs some work. The elimination of foreign-born officers did not take place in 1853, but in 1855, under Mayor Boone. The phrasing makes it sound otherwise. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Sam Paris (talk • contribs) 18:18, 14 December 2017 (UTC)

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